The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
A society is the agglomeration of its people with different religion, race, traditions and cultures. The future of a society is dependent on the youngest generation and the values which are taught to them. I agree with the assertion made in the prompt that the best way to preapre the young is by teaching them the value of cooperation and not completion.
The young generation of a society is at a juncture in their life where they can be molded into respected and valued leaders if they are provided the right guidance and shown the correct path by their elders. A leader are the pivot of any organization or country and play a crucial role in its flourishment or deterioration. One of the most valued quality of a leader can be the skill to negotiate and cooperate with others whether it be a business transaction or a policy debate. Leaders who value cooperation are less prone too overreaching and destructive tendencies and take decisions which are in the best interest of the organization. Consider the example of Steve jobs, one of the most competitive leader of the 21st century. In 1997, when apple was suffering huge amount of loss and was at the verge of bankruptcy, he startled everyone by making a deal with bill gates, the ceo of Microsoft, the rival of apple. If Steve jobs had not set aside his competitive nature and made the deal with gates, apple might not have survived to be the present behemoth it is. Hence, the most valuable quality which we must teach our young is the ability to cooperate.
In today's world where we have leaders of different countries representing different cultures, traditions and societal ideologies, it has become very important that they cooperate with each other to solve the growing problems of the world and not get bogged down in the sense of competition which is human nature. One of the biggest challenges facing the human kind is the global warming and climate change, which requires different countries to work together and find a cure to the problem but alas the sense of competition hinders them.
However, a sense of competition is human nature and is useful as it allows us to become more productive and efficient in our task. The sense of competition gives us a goal of surpassing others and rising to the top. We must teach our young a sense of healthy competition and teach them when to set aside the sense of competition and cooperate to achieve the higher goal.
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- Although sound moral judgment is an important characteristic of an effective leader, it is not as important as a leader’s ability to maintain the respect of his or her peers 66
- Summarize the points in the audio and contrast them against lecture. 3
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... correct path by their elders. A leader are the pivot of any organization or countr...
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Line 3, column 978, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not set aside his competitive nature and made the deal with gates, apple might no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76179245283 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73844115169 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485849056604 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0634082276 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.1875 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.6875 5.21951772744 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180839727804 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643754470734 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044509301468 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126002039819 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528698097205 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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