Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The men/women working at the top of their fields have the power to change the world. The argument claims that these people, no matter which field they work in should step down after five years and a new person must be choosen to head the organisation consequently. It suggests that one should adopt this principle because the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. I mosty disagee with the claim for the following two reasons.
First of all, a person gets choosen by the members of the enterprise to head them all. This means that he/she is selected after overcoming various odds in their way of assuming leadership of the organisation. If they do achieve it, this means that they are capable of heading such an organisation and also have the trust of those who had a hand in his/her appointment. They should conspicously step down from that position after ten or fifteen years but five years is a very short time for a leader to demonstrate the effect of his/her changes in the working of the organisation. Any big policy they do introduce would take atleast some years to show its effect on an organisation as big as a country. For example, in India the decision to allow foreign investment and open up the economy globally for various investment opportunities was only regarded a brilliant move ten years down the line. The leader should get an ample amount of time to prove his/her worth assuming the confidence of the people in him does not drop drastically.
The President of the USA can only serve two terms, that is eight years, following which he/she has to step down. This is effective rather than stepping down in five years as eight years is considerable for any policy change to show its effects . However, as elections are held every four years, the citizens do get a chance on rejecting him as their President. As long as those in power have the support of the majority, they should be able to lead the enterprise. We witness this in the field of business where Elon Musk has been the CEO of Tesla for over twelve years now. Even Jack Ma, the founder of Alibaba has been the CEO for more than ten years. The ones in power should remain in power as long as the enterprise being run by them is successful in majority of the aspects of the business or their field and have the trust of the ones in the enterprise.
In conclusion, be it any field- business, politics, education, government, those in power should remain in power as long as there is growth and innovation present in the enterprise. However, they should be kept in check so that they cannot misuse these powers causing harm to the enterprise and its people.
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...erson gets choosen by the members of the enterprise to head them all. This means ...
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...le in him does not drop drastically. The President of the USA can only serve...
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...trust of the ones in the enterprise. In conclusion, be it any field- business...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 475.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66105263158 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58873317267 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486315789474 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0343906819 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.7 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313391512335 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917063448619 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810975084578 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216478603379 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883506664465 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.