Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The given issue claims that power in any field like business, education, politics, government should be changed after five
years. The author thinks that revitalization throuth new leadershio can ensure success. I think, the author has generalized
the statement a bit. In case of education and business, it will be wise to go with an experienced leader rather than
a new leader. On the other hand, when it comes to politics and government, changing power in these fields can be beneficial for
the society.
To begin with, in case of business organizations, it takes a long time to produce an adroit leader who can lead the organization
with his prompt actions and decisions. Business organizations normally deal with various stakeholders. It takes times for a person to
gain the faith of stakeholders. So, one become an efficient and responsible leader after a long time working with the ohter people in
the company and the stakeholders So, changing power after a certain period of time will not be a good thing for a business corporation
because it will cost a lot to produce a new leader to replace the old one.
Same goes for education. One might argue that changing leadership in educational case would facilitate to experiment with new ideas that
are generated from the new leaders. But again, to ensure a stable educational system, we should not change leaders frequentl in the educational sector.
Let's take an example of a university. The head of a university has a lots of duties. He has to connect with faculties, students and officials
in the university. He has to connect with people outside the university like scholars from various fields, higher authority of the university and
all. He manages funds for various research projects. All these things he does need years of experience. If the leader of a university is changed
frequently or after a certain period then it will not be easy for that universiy to flourish. So, the university will not be able to afford to change an
experienced leader.
Now coming to the point of politics. In case of politics, I think leadership should be changed after a certain period of time. Now, one may argue that just like
university president and corporate leaders, leaders in politics should be in power for a longer period of time. But, in most political cases, a leader who
remains in power for a relatively longer period of time, becomes a dictator. Then he tries to misuse his power and takes away freedom form the people. So, the risk
of producing a dictator justifies the cost of producing a new leader. So, in this case, the advantages of having a new leader after 5 years outstrips the advantages
of having an old one.
To conclude, the authors' idea of changing leadership after 5 years may be beneficial in some cases. But there are situations where it may not be effective. In case of
business and education, going with an experienced leader may lead us to a prosperous result. On the other hand, in case of government and politics, changing leaders may
be more effective as government and leaders may become dictative if they enjoy power for a longer period of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eholders. It takes times for a person to gain the faith of stakeholders. So, one ...
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...ng time working with the ohter people in the company and the stakeholders So, cha...
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...ders So, changing power after a certain period of time will not be a good thing for a business...
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...litate to experiment with new ideas that are generated from the new leaders. But ...
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...s frequentl in the educational sector. Lets take an example of a university. The he...
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...niversity. The head of a university has a lots of duties. He has to connect with facul...
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...r authority of the university and all. He manages funds for various research proj...
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...If the leader of a university is changed frequently or after a certain period the...
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...rship should be changed after a certain period of time. Now, one may argue that just like un...
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... time. Now, one may argue that just like university president and corporate leade...
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...olitics should be in power for a longer period of time. But, in most political cases, a leader...
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...t, in most political cases, a leader who remains in power for a relatively longer...
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...emains in power for a relatively longer period of time, becomes a dictator. Then he tries to m...
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...misuse his power and takes away freedom form the people. So, the risk of producing...
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...ay freedom form the people. So, the risk of producing a dictator justifies the co...
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... having an old one. To conclude, the authors idea of changing leadership after 5 yea...
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...tative if they enjoy power for a longer period of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then, as to, i think, in some cases, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2668.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95910780669 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81521883399 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431226765799 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.38483146067 365% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.5619198793 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.064516129 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3548387097 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8064516129 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.97078651685 463% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161529772778 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490715578753 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700309554435 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.058971145103 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709995071548 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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