Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
The given text presents the claim that governments must ensure that major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive. The reason given is that cities are the sites where a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. I agree with the claim but disagree with the reason given to substantiate it.
In today's world, major cities are flourishing centers of trade and development. Most major companies set up their offices in these cities. Most people who are unemployed go to such cities to look for jobs. New factories crop up on the outskirts of these cities to take advantage of the ease of trade. Thus, these cities are the places where most of the economic growth takes place. To support this growth, I believe the government should definitely offer whatever financial support is needed for these cities to thrive and continue contributing to the nation's economy.
While these cities are huge factors in the nation's economic success, I believe they severly lag behind in cultural preservation. Centuries ago, there were very less "major cities", if they even could be called that. The small towns and villages were the places where culture would flourish. Artists would display and sell their work, sculptors would sculpt beautiful earthen pots, while snake charmers would enthrall the audience with their impressive skill of charming a snake. As cities and metropolitans came up, people migrated to them to seek jobs and settle in a better place. However, these cultural traditions remained in the smaller villages and towns. City life was too fast-paced to handle such idiosyncracies of the rural life. For instance, even now, small towns on the outskirts of New Delhi house snake charmers who go from town to town to show their skills and earn a living. Finding these snake charmers inside the city bounds is a rare event.
Due to the huge inflow of migrants into major cities, the culture of the cities became a pot-pourri. Lines between cultural identities became blurred and they merged to form one big cosmopolitan culture in which they lost their unique characters. Many residents of New Delhi, for instance, hailed from different states nearby such as Haryana, Punjab, Uttar Pradesh and Bihar; but on coming to New Delhi, they drowned in the cosmopolitan culture of the city and slowly lost the cultural identities they had nurtured back in their hometowns.
To conclude, I would like to say tha governments should definitely support major cities financially but such cities severly lag behind in cultural preservation and generation and it would be unwise to cite this reason to justify their financial support.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...iven is that cities are the sites where a nations cultural traditions are preserved and g...
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Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...thrive and continue contributing to the nations economy. While these cities are hu...
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Line 9, column 850, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'town to'.
Suggestion: town to
... Delhi house snake charmers who go from town to town to show their skills and earn a living. Fi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, then, thus, while, as to, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15789473684 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5902313348 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512585812357 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.5023734252 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.454545455 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8636363636 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462612925711 0.243740707755 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1322961195 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124085033019 0.0758088955206 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285763625034 0.150359130593 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137355633428 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.