Nowadays, people struggle with so many things in daily basis. They have to cope with many stuff and difficulties simultaneously every day. Consequently, it is natural and completely make sense if people feel some sort of boredom in today's intricate world than they than people who lived decades ago. There are different opinions on toward this interminable people's sense of boredom. Some people hold the idea that stemming from lack if imagination and self -motivation, boredom should be considered as source of embarrassment. However, others, with whom my standpoint is aligned, believe that boredom can be belonged to any source except for embarrassment. In what follows, I will delineate my viewpoint on the ground of two persuasive reasons.
Without a doubt, the most consequential point corroborating my stance on this subject is that pervasiveness of boredom and lack of interest, which is evident in many today's peoples regardless of their nationality or where they live, is due to millions of efforts they have done and being unable to achieve what they want because of outside factors. For instance, consider an engineer who have been working for 5 years in a company. In the first years of his career, surly, he was very passionate about his job and his tasks, and he did his whatever he could in order to help the company to reach its goals. Imagine, for example, he thought that after five years of hard-working he would be promoted and be able to buy the car or the house he always wanted. But now, he sees himself still in the position as same as five years ago, without attaining any of his goals. Even if he were promoted, he could not buy the stuff he always wanted because of, for instance, the high rate of inflation in his country. It is logical that his zeal has declined during these years, and he feels a high level of boredom now. This sort of boredom has nothing to do with lack of imagination or self-motivation, but other factors, which was not under his control, makes him become what he is now. This is what is currently happening in countries like Iran, which suffer from high rate of inflation.
Although the previous reason is the first one crossing the mind at first glance, another remarkable point deserving some words here is that not every feel of boredom is long-lasting. Human's brain has a certain capacity. This capacity differs from person to person. Nonetheless, eventually when the capacity of person's brain reaches its maximum level, he becomes bored and feel tired. In this situation, people might lose their passion or stimulus for a while, but they can retrieve it. This kind of boredom is ephemeral, and psychologists unanimously agree that under this condition, people should shelve their tasks and unwind from their daily activities to let their brain gain its power again. This kind of boredom is also widespread in today's people as most of them work arduously every day.
To make the long story short, and reflecting upon all the aforementioned grounds, one soon realizes that the boredom and lack of interest, which is seen in very people in today's societies, might have originated from different sources. It is neither fair nor rational to regard all types of boredom embarrassing as they might appear because of the outsider factors intervene, or they could be stem from long period of hard-working, which is the transient type of boredom.
- Claim While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self satisfaction it should really be a source of embarrassment Reason Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation 50
- Claim Colleges and universities should specify all required courses and eliminate elective courses in order to provide clear guidance for students Reason College students like people prefer to follow directions rather than make their own decisions
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- Claim While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self satisfaction it should really be a source of embarrassment Reason Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation 58
- Some people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species despite the expense to humans in effort time and financial well being Others believe that society need not make extraordinary efforts especially at a great cost in money an 66
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, while, except for, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2830.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 576.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91319444444 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71406089527 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515625 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.479906542 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.04 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.24 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211414698035 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622982066402 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728550563463 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141062124341 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633690594944 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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