The given prompt argues that students should pursue degree in those fields where job availability is high in market. I disagree with the prompt because availability of job in certain field is volatile and unpredictable, lack of student interest may worsen his grade. Even though, following the advice individual can get the job early after graduation, lack of interest on those fields may be hindrance for prospective growth in future.
No one can predict the vacant position of job in the future. The availability of vacancy in given field is similar to global economy. For instance, 10 years ago, nursing career was deemed lucrative career at that time, having numerous vacancy and good stipend. However, after 5 years, nurses were so numerous that amateur nurses were mostly unoccupied, or either doing volunteer. Moreover, at present days, due to the government policy to enhance the Nepalese language, scope of Nepali teacher, who were sitting idle in past years, have been increased. Thus, students, who pursue the major on the basis of job availability, cannot meet the expected outcome if the vacancy decline due to many reason.
The students cannot perform well if he is not keen towards that field, regardless how much the field be lucrative or high vacancy. Since the student is not interested, he will have difficult having high grades and work hard for study. Having lower grades, he will be surpassed by other candidate while applying in lucrative position and lower grade act as impediment in the development of career. On the other hand, if the student is matriculated in interested field, he can perform best in academic performance and other practical fields. As a result, his possibility to be enrolled in high position will be high, despite of being moderate vacancy.
Some people argue that being heedfulness of job availability, students pursuing according to advice will be able to get the decent job immediately after their graduation. Let suppose it may be true, given that job availability is high, but do people, who are not interested, will have happy life or will one be keen to enhance their career. The Indian popular writer Chetan Bhagwat has done is major in engineering, but he left his occupation as it is and pursued the career of writer. Therefore, pursuing career based on availability can make one’s occupation blasé if he/she is not interested in their field.
In conclusion, Student’s should not focus on major based on job presence because job vacancies are fickle and uninterested course selection can hamper on their grade. However, they may get job easily,choosing uninterested course may act as obstacle for future career growth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...may be hindrance for prospective growth in future. No one can predict the vacant po...
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Line 1, column 438, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rance for prospective growth in future. No one can predict the vacant position o...
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Line 3, column 688, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...d outcome if the vacancy decline due to many reason. The students cannot perform well i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he vacancy decline due to many reason. The students cannot perform well if he i...
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Line 9, column 205, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , choosing
... grade. However, they may get job easily,choosing uninterested course may act as obstacle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15261958998 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81046318369 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514806378132 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6611354818 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.1 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.95 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275035032544 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960501471437 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093094920762 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167605630006 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746075524971 0.0667264976115 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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