Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Many students have established an interest in certain fields of study, only after they enter university. However, science research may be involved for these freshmen. Many educational institutions thus will help these students to select a specific field in which they will get succeed. But does it make sense? There is not any general agreement. Basically, I agree with these institutions since they are helping these students and will be benefit to the speed of the science study. While to prevent students from choosing fields that cannot get visible accomplishment is so absolute.
First, there is no doubt that those students who have chosen a promising field are more likely to succeed. When they find a interested area, there will be more experienced professors and partners who can potently help them to realize their purpose. They will achieve their goals and get good reputations, leading to a better life degree even for students’ families. Moreover, this, that they select a easy way to succeed, will be beneficial not only to themselves, but also the industry of various science studies. These fields are more easily to get excellent students resources and filled with more vigorous blood. They are usually some vital fields which may be correlated with our daily life. Since these fields develop fast, we can live in a better life and make the full use of new results of science studies. For instance, the medical industry is transferred a huge amount of high-level students every year. Only because their diligent study and work, our health condition can be granted safely. These are attractive with the huge resources of research and materials of medical industry and suffer from the most strict practice. Then they will quickly be adept in work and be successful quickly. Indeed, it’s important that educational industries can lead them into some necessary fields and help them to get goals quickly.
However, should these industries always sway their students to choose a field as we discussed before? Absolutely not! Only studying in promising fields is really harmful, not only to these students themselves, but also the education and society. First, some students may be talented in particular fields and they might achieve what their pioneers never get. Even they may exceed their forebears and accomplish some history tough problems. So if the student are interested enough or gifted, there selection should be support. And also there had been a lot of innovations were discovered by young men and led a big impact on the world. Stephen Hawking, the founder of black hole ,when he pointed out this theory he was only a university student too. This field is not hot at that time, since the astronomy was so distant for normal person. But with the support of his professor and the leader of lab, he finally stated a lot of essential theory which significantly improved the modern astrophysics. Public had a better recoganization upon these distant matters and were edified by these great founds. This achievement is based on the investigation of his characteristics and talent. Finally, they made a good decision.
It is thus clear that this topic depends on the specific circumstances instead of being generalized. On the one hand, I indeed agree with those students who are effected by authorities and they are more likely to succeed and at the same time are willing to devote into it. On the other hand, I am more concerned whether educational institutes can provide appropriate recommendations to students who are particularly gifted and persistent on a goal, even though which may take their life long to concentrate on. Therefore, I support these students to choose their own fields independently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in particular, no doubt, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3137.0 2235.4752809 140% => OK
No of words: 612.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12581699346 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97379470361 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76808140403 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498366013072 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 974.7 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9958569283 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6285714286 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4857142857 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37142857143 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 27.0 10.2758426966 263% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268224907981 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691340543902 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620301567777 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19214633314 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456924837718 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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