Educational institution plays a very important role in building one's career and grooming a child to face the world. However, I do not agree with the author that it is the responsibility of educational institutions to dissuade students from following their whim and force to pursue a field of study which is more likely to help them succeed.
Educational institutions have a sole responsibility to educate students and provide all means to help them build their career. They are liable to provide good education and support that a child's need, but cannot guarantee that the child will be successful. Also it doesn't mean that a child who didn't complete his education will not be successfully. Notable examples of such cases would be famous scientist Thomas Elva Edison and Apple founder Steve Job, who both were dropouts and were extremely successful in their career.
Success cannot be defined by accounting single measure. For one, success means having billions in a bank account while for other; success just means living a long healthy life. Thus educational institutions cannot account for all these measures and cannot predict good fortune for a child. However happiness and good fortune can be predicted when one follows his or her dream and makes one's hobby his or her career.
Therefore students should be allowed to choose the field of study they want to pursue so that they are more dedicated towards it and are more likely to be successful. For example, a student who has interest in photography will have fewer chances to succeed in a field of engineering. Instead if he is allowed to follow his dream, then he could become a famous wildlife photographer and be very successful in his life.
Lastly, it is not clear by author’s remark that who will decide for students on which field will lead them to success. Will it be a counsellor or a teacher? Definitely they can help a student with his or her queries or help to make out a decision when they are being ambivalent. But they cannot forecast future. A successful career in present times may not be a promising one in the future.
Thus educational institutions cannot foresee what will guarantee success for a child and hence do not hold responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223776223776 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.181818181818 0.157235817809 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0769230769231 0.0880659088768 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0652680652681 0.0497285424764 131% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0699300699301 0.0444667217837 157% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0885780885781 0.12292977631 72% => OK
Participles: 0.030303030303 0.0406280797675 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76634022196 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.037296037296 0.030933414821 121% => OK
Particles: 0.002331002331 0.0016655270985 140% => OK
Determiners: 0.0675990675991 0.0997080785238 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.041958041958 0.0249443105267 168% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.02331002331 0.0148568991511 157% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2324.0 2732.02544248 85% => OK
No of words: 392.0 452.878318584 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.92857142857 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349489795918 0.366273622748 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.262755102041 0.280924506359 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.170918367347 0.200843997647 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.102040816327 0.132149295362 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76634022196 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 219.290929204 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484693877551 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.1610850451 55.4138127331 94% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.6315789474 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4074024084 59.4972553346 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.315789474 141.124799967 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.684210526316 0.674092028746 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.21349557522 173% => OK
Readability: 46.9070891515 51.4728631049 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.08088235294 1.64882698954 66% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399344544293 0.391690518653 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118969626347 0.123202303941 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0699972904089 0.077325440228 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.51612095785 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16777815049 0.149214159877 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132724328681 0.161403998019 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117117690707 0.0892212321368 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.220518153047 0.385218514788 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.067305410327 0.0692045440612 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266384990521 0.275328986314 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129753678473 0.0653680567796 198% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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