Albert Einstein once said “Everybody is a genius but if you judge a fish by its ability to swim it will live its whole life believing that it is stupid.” The formal educational system is given to every child in the same way regardless of the fact that we are different ,hence that is why I mostly agree with the above statement. This essay will comprise of two reasons why the reader agrees with the statement and one reason the statement might not be true.
No child is the same, some are good and Maths, some at Reading and writing, some in sports and fine arts. The reason I believe formal education tends to restrain our minds is because it does not look at the child’s special needs but instead uses the same rigid way to educate our children. For example if we can go back to Albert Einstein’s we can see that he is basically stating that you have to judge someone’s intelligence by the one thing they know best and not by an educational system that has been put in place and has been allowed to be the one way we judge intelligence in someone. There are children that do exceptionally well in drawing or playing the guitar, and are dismally failing in formal education, so does this mean they are dumb? Absolutely not! So what formal education does is that it restricts the child’s mind to thinking they are not geniuses because they are getting D grades, but if we put these children in a school of arts focusing on the one thing they know best they would often times than not do exceptionally well.
Furthermore, Formal education has from a young age moulded us into believing that in order for us to be successful we need to get good grades, and get a good job by working for someone. It has neglected the fact that some people do not need good grades to become successful but can nurture their gifts and talents or even start their own business to become successful. There are a lot of unemployed people in the Kingdom of Eswatini with degrees and masters from prestigious universities but are living in poverty because no one is employing them. This is because formal education has restrained their minds into believing that they need to go out and get hired by someone when in fact they can they can start their own businesses or consultancy with their expertise and knowledge.
Lastly formal educational is not all bad in that it is a necessity to acquiring basic problem solving skills, reasoning, strategic thinking and debunking as well as basic human conduct which are very important in our everyday lives. There tends to be a huge difference between an imbecile and a learned person because of these fine skills that are learnt through formal education.
With that said Formal education has to find a way in which they can work with each student personally and design their own specific way they will learn and be productive. A way that includes formal education but does not put an emphasis on it so that a child’s intelligence may be judged on the things they are good at. In this way the child will get to learn both the fine skills that come with formal education and will also develop child talents and skills simultaneously.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, look, may, so, well, as to, for example, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 565.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66194690265 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66663703745 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440707964602 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 826.2 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8453443685 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.625 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3125 23.4991977007 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176329048704 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629801128367 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426073654308 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104816880452 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275374571916 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.8420337079 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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