In my opinion, I'm partially agree with the point that concerning welfare of nation's people as a indication of that nation's greatness. Because different people have their own attitude to measured a great countires, it hard to say a county with high welfare of nation's people would be better.
As we all know, welfare would be a basic insurance of people living. It also could be regarded as the mission of the governments. Nevertheless, the government's income, which would be generally from tax or trading with other countires, is the primarily resources of the welfare. If a country have a enough economical income, the govenrmnt would have enough strength to improve the welfare standard. Thus, most of the people argue that a country with high welfare would be greatness. It is not wrong, but it has condition.
Surly, welfare could be regarded as a standard of a country's greatness. For example, Australia have a considerable high welfare that attract many people to immigrate to that country. However, if a country pursue a sustainable improvement, the government have to increase the fund committemnt in science research, industry, entertainment, etc. Because these seemed abtruse research may have offered a new idea of governance, a new technology that used in some appliances so that people could feel the convenience of daily life. These interesting entertainment productions, such as movie, songs, or something else, may lead a new chic that enriching people's cultural life. If the whole world was facing some economics crisis or natural catastrophe, some country which is strong in technology or science would be refreshed quickly. Therefore, these countries would not experience a substaintial decrease in national people living standard. Focusing on these elements, the country will have steady development. And the welfare, generally, would also be increased as the country's developemnt in all aspects.
All in all, if a country have persuit of development, the government have to focus on both welfare and science and technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 326.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28220858896 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02104727476 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518404907975 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0585990522 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130210715678 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465217077649 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548254930981 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972475915662 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781541298612 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.