Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Nowadays, there is a heated debate on whether governments should invest as much in the arts as in the military. As far as I am concerned, it should depend on the current condition of the society. Thus, I do not totally agree with this statement for the following reasons.
Primarily, many countries especially those in Middle East and Africa are still suffering in wars. In such a unstable condition, governments should spend their resource on more important stuff. It would be wise for them to invest in something that influence matters of life and death instead of something trivial such as the arts. Since if people do not even have a peaceful daily lives, worrying about meals and safety everyday, they would not care about art at all. As a consequence, applying the proposed recommendation in this case would not be as advantageous as we expect.
Although investment of art should not be the top priority for those unstable societies, for most developed countries, adopting this recommendation will lead to many advantages. Since nowadays, developed countries have little chance to get involved wars, they do not need to invest in the military that much. Learning and enjoying art makes people's lives more colorful and varied. Studies have showed that appreciating or creating arts can make aid to the quality of life by helping people manage stress, relax and improve their creativity. Art plays an important role in people's lives. And if everybody in the society all have a satisfying life, the well-being of the society as a whole will thus be enhanced. Therefore, government should invest more resource in it.
In conclusion, although not every country is able to afford investing as much resource in the arts as they do in military, governments which have such capability should actively applying this policy.
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...ch have such capability should actively applying this policy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 302.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05629139073 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79599833403 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562913907285 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6168817158 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4375 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220711680354 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736721912022 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064528122407 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159090951382 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528518924935 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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