To improve leadership in the next generation, the society must instill a sense of cooperation rather than competition.
Good leaders are created by challenging conditions and insurmountable tasks. The prompt states that the best possible method to prepare the young people of the society for leadership in various fields is through cooperation and not through competition. I moderately disagree with the given statement and would like to express my opinion in a three-part thesis.
First of all, people need to understand that competition is not a negative entity. Each and every person requires some sort of competition, both, in order to grow as well as to learn something new. For example, let us assume a company which has two production managers who work together to handle the operations of the firm. Both of them are from extremely competitive backgrounds and thus are always competing with each other for excellence. They always tend to come up with something innovative in order to go one up on the other individual. In such a case, the ultimate winner is the company as they get two hardworking innovative individuals who thrive in a competitive environment. In such a case, competition rather than cooperation is the driving factor behind the good leadership illustrated in the operations of the company.
Moreover, competition is the cornerstone of excellence. For example, in the 20th century the whole world was at war, on the battlefields most of the time. But the leading scientists of the technological world always competed to make their country better than the other countries. Such a competition gave birth to a lot of advancements and inventions. It also gave us many great leaders of the science field of the world. Thus, the role of competition cannot be shunned in creating leaders, rather, competition was the primary reason behind excellence.
On the other hand, the role of cooperation cannot be neglected as well. Competition without cooperation will only give rise to animosity and ill-will among the employees and would create a huge impediment in their way of achieving personal growth as well as that of the company. For example, the two managers used in the first example only focus on being better than the other. In such case they will learn nothing more and would never yearn for personal development. If cooperative, both of them can work together on some challenging issues in order to solve it quickly and more efficiently.
Thus it can be elucidated from the given three points that cooperation and competition go hand in hand in the development of a good leader. The nature of the given prompt is not binary and thus in conclusion, the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in various fields is by instilling in them a sense of competition, while not completing ignoring the cooperative aspect.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... of competition, both, in order to grow as well as to learn something new. For example, le...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...lve it quickly and more efficiently. Thus it can be elucidated from the given thr...
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Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'hand in'.
Suggestion: hand in
...nts that cooperation and competition go hand in hand in the development of a good leader. The n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, sort of, as well as, first of all, as well as that, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03938730853 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96662369048 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479212253829 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.156919824 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.130434783 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8695652174 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21739130435 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138686514772 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356295944988 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588882186945 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849991697231 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485336387252 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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