As contextualized in the paraphrase that it is a joint responsibility of the whole village to work towards the raise of child, but it also shows up lot unquestioned scenarios which had not been taken into consideration while coming upto to the coda of the suggestion. Statement telltell that child is reared not by only teachers and locals but it should be obliging or incumbent of whole villager to make sure child is been nurisched in appropriate manner. It has been esotericlly publised data, it has lot of relevance into the topic but fails to cite evidence which supports it. So paraphrase is rife with bunch of loophole which should had been taken into notice before we get to the conclusion.
It is rightly stated by author, that child is should be raised by the village as whole, but in what sense or based on what scenarios this statement had been punched ? What consequences led the people to think that it should be joint responsibilty of all the peoples ? Are teachers or local school admistrators are not to the capabibilty to take care of students as whole ? Are staff of the school are short of peoples ? - there are plenty of questions and flux on which whole gist lies, apart from forthrightly coming up on conclusion. Ideally in village, people quatadion work includes laborious field work which starts from dawn and ends on dusk. so to with sticking to this schedule they can hardly manage to take out time for grooming the children. So to go with pragmatic approach, the learing or grooming for children lies on back of schools which are sage authority in village.
As sentence conveys, that it should be directly villagers who should be engaged or responsible for children education, if it was stated apart from education which provided by school, if they need more ethical learning or any pragmatic knowledge than source should be village as whole.
There are ecclectic way from which author would had gained prerequisite knowledge, which would lend reader to understand that to support the paraphrase this all discrete evidence advocates them. To add on bighter side, it undeniable as mentioned the sentence, that responsibilty as whole lies on shoulders of everyone in village, but if added as to theme what what learning you expect from the villagers would have been benificiel to reader. Is the knowledge provided by the school or admin authority are insuffucient in some term or it villagers expound knowledge in comparison to schools. After taking into contexr various aspects of the text, we could have gain enough knowledge to gainsay or accept the fact as whole.
It is properly releavant that villagers should add to raise a child but what lends us to think or come to this conclusion have some empty questions, which needs to be answered before jot down the conclusion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...is rightly stated by author, that child is should be raised by the village as whol...
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Line 3, column 650, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...hich starts from dawn and ends on dusk. so to with sticking to this schedule they ...
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Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: what
...ne in village, but if added as to theme what what learning you expect from the villagers ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, apart from, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89495798319 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74231643788 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487394957983 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4831088286 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.444444444 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4444444444 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38888888889 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180979718414 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649992130912 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583823458538 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104109830725 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327254253108 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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