It is undeniable that technology is burgeoning as we speak. With the development of technology, we have reduced a multitude of problems which we faced in the past. This induced an ambiguity between luxury and lethargy. I believe that with further investigation into the argument we can resolve the discrepancy that why luxury would hinder personal development.
It is true that when the human mind is soporific, it blinds the individual of his capabilities and confines any development. For instance, the mankind was introduced to fire in the archaic period. The fire was used to cook, light the houses and keep the wild beasts away. Then we saw the discovery of electricity, which revolutionized the world. This discovery made the job easier but still, people had to work to eat and survive. The problems never went away, they were simply presented in a different form.
In retrospect, we used to rely on pigeons and messengers to deliver messages and communicate between longer distances. It would take days, weeks or even months for some messages to be delivered. With the invention of the Internet, people who are continents apart could communicate at light speed. It is foolish to think that personal development can be achieved only through hardships. An individual develops when he acknowledges his roles and responsibilities as a citizen.
A formidable example which could be an anchor to my argument is the way the modes of transportation has evolved and the effect it had on the human culture. What could take weeks to travel between cities can now be done in a few hours. We do not see families scaling huge mountains to travel between pilgrimages. Yet we still see the responsibilities of every family member hold the same ever since the evolution of mankind.
A pattern if we notice, is that as technology evolved so did the problems. As the problems evolved, so did humans. Sure humans are contingent on technology. This dependency would hold only because the technology was developed to make life easier, take that away, the primary rule would still prevail: Survival of the fittest. This concludes that luxuries of today does not hinder the personal development of an individual.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, then, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04931506849 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97293224611 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556164383562 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1541426396 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.7916666667 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2083333333 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08333333333 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0998913275529 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259550456469 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304522527874 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0568941194229 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270808871456 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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