The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. [Specific Task Instruction: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that contemporary life bring us about so many luxuries and convenience that it prevent people from being truly independent and strong, whick I partly agree with. Undeniably, it is those who could enjoy loneliness are truly independent and inener strong people. However, in my opinions, enjoying loneliness, which is a certain mental state, has littel to do with the physical life.
Admittedly, in the high-tech world of communication, internet, and satellite, the contemporary generation is enjoying the most convenient and luxury life that our intellect and diligence grant to us. However, in the meanwhile, these sorts of high technology deprave our right of being lonely and independent. Automobiles could deliver us to any physical destinations, such that we depend on them as crutches, thereby taking away our desire to walking, running or even wondering. We even begin to be at the mercy of automobiles when automobiles become not only a kind of transportation tools byt also a symbol of social status. We render out financial security into jeopardy to buy a new SUV or luxury sedan to gain other's admirations or envy. By be the same token, the burgeoning of luxury shows the increasing licing standards on one hand, other wise indicates people's vanity and self identification established based on other's comment, which shows our inner vulnerability across the board. We are nervous social climbers with mere and baser ambitions and greed.
However, I believe self-identity is the biggest and immediate beneficiary of modern luxury and convenient life. The internet result in information overload on one hand, however inform us all kinds of values, customs and beliefs to develop our logical thinking and keen judgment. In the process, we dig more in the philosophy world and finally form our own viewpoints. Automobile as well, provide us liberty and satisfy every caprice to go wherever we want, to go with our willing,and seek our moment of loneliness. And convenient facilities free up our time by performing repetitive tasks and provide us more time and space to vent our emotions and pursue our feelings. Moreover, advanced medical technology and medicine allow for safer and less invasive diagnoses and prescriptions, to aid people get away from affliction of diseases and epidemic. Genetics could even engineer away nascent defects. Consider to what extent if any, would something else be more beneficial than these kinds of convenience? And our emotions and spirits are truly the most lasting and immediate beneficiary of all these kinds of technological innovations.
As I see it, that we inculpate our loss of motions, our increasing lazy and compromise to technology is itself a kind of dependence and less strength as a species. Put another way, whether a person is independent and strong or not lies on oneself instead of any other outer influence or dominance. Anything is a two-fold sword, and which fold is in more priority depends totally on how we use it. Some people buy vehicles for convenience, and some for enjoyment, and others for luxury. Some people use computer being immersed in the internet for satisfying the baser instincts, while others use computer to aid the design of safer and more attractive bridges, buildings and vehicles. As to television programs, some people are immersed in trashy talk shows or advertisements to meet the ephemeral satisfaction and temporal venting of emotions, while others are indicated into international events and situations. If we see fit to use conveniences and luxuries to squander our talent, then so be it. On the contrary, if we see fit to use these to add to our intellect and independence, then so be it as well.
In the final analysis, I believe that convenience and luxury means either the progress or the retreat of our dependence and strength as individuals, which take precedence depends on ourselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The speaker asserts that contemporary life bring us ...
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Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_OUR_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'our'?
Suggestion: our
...so a symbol of social status. We render out financial security into jeopardy to buy...
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Line 5, column 842, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: otherwise
...ncreasing licing standards on one hand, other wise indicates peoples vanity and self ident...
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Line 9, column 480, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...wherever we want, to go with our willing,and seek our moment of loneliness. And conv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, as to, kind of, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 49.0 14.8657303371 330% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3291.0 2235.4752809 147% => OK
No of words: 635.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18267716535 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01988110783 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99308148855 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 333.0 215.323595506 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524409448819 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 1062.9 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0054604675 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.535714286 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6785714286 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82142857143 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172348109698 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047960366718 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583667245643 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124699168836 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849472154416 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 177.0 100.480337079 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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