Internet and mass media is undoubtedly the boon to our generation with playing a major role in bringing the world closer. As suggested in the claim, I mostly agree with the author about the positive effect brought by internet and mass media for two reasons. However, I do concede that even though internet has overwhelmed us with the ample of opportunities on the web, it has significantly affected our efficiency to absorb that content with the desired attention.
First of all, internet and mass media have opened plethora of opportunities for people to enhance their abilities and to make the best use of the data available to them. With the amount of information that is accessible to anyone, one can develop skills which can help them make a living out of it. With online courses, students in remote areas can learn from teachers across the globe. For example, a student situated in a remote village in India, only with the help of internet can attend an online course about a pragramming language like Java from a tutor in a univeristy at California. People get more exposure to a variety of resources which allows them to choose the method of learning most suitable to them. They gain knowledge that enhances their skills, widens their opinions and makes them a more confident individual.
Secondly, with the boom of internet, people have now begun to realise the power of data that is the importance of information. With the ability to store and process large quantities of data obtained from the interent efficiently, new fields in computer science like data science, machine learning and artificial intelligence have emerged. For instance, understanding what kind of content the user consumes, the advertisements shown to that user are filtered in a way that the most relevant advertisements reach that particualr user. In addition to these, even the recommendations which users get of Youtube and other OTT platforms are according to genre they are most likely to watch, suggestions being tailored personally to suit their choices.
However, interent has also impacted the way we respond to the ample amout of information thrown at us. The attention span of average individual has decreased because of having so many options. There is no denying in the fact that now humans cannot go back to doing only one single task at a time. Internet has provided many opportunities and it depends on us how we use it to our advantage or to our disadvantage.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 564, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97336561743 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82659418617 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55205811138 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7318820616 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.823529412 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2941176471 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244817704748 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740135869657 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057236544613 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129405623045 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530774999515 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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