men and women , because of their inherent physical differences are not equally suited for many tasks
The disparate of the gender in the workforce have always been a controversial rubric since ages and it is one among a trending issue in the contemporary world . The prompt recommends that men and women are not suited equally for most of the tasks due to their physical attribution . In my opinion , i disagree with respect with the suggestion that men and women are not equally preferred due to their bodily attributes because of the following two reasons.
To begin with , with the current age of booming technology is seeing an unprecedented heights , so does the representation of women in the work force. This is clearly a conspicious change with respect to various historic ages such as the industrial revolution - though women were working in that period, they were not significant . For example , consider the sector of Information Technology - which by far the progenitor and the leader of our modern civilisation and will continue to do so in coming decades. In this aforementioned sector , the female sex tend to out number the male sex's contribution in both the quantitative aspect as well as working efficiency . This is given by the fact that more and more number of women actively engage nowadays like never before . Also we can attribute this to the fact that there is also a huge rise in the number of women CEOs , which is far higher than the one in previous decade .For all these reasons , women who have been considered to do domestic chores , now are the bread winner of a significant proportion of families , atleast in the modern world if not in the Information Technology field , then in any other booming sectors such as surgeon. This illustration shows us that men and women though borne with physical indifferences, are qually suited for many tasks .
Further ,men who are thought and accustomed to do outdoor chores where they are subjected to tribulation , and women restricted to her house due to the general view of the society, have their job roles reversed respectively . For instance , a survey undertaken recently in the state of ohio , had given an uncommon outcome- that men are completely okay with the fact that they are asked to do the household jobs such as cooking , babycare etc., which once primarily were the tasks of mother . This 'job reversal' which might be viewed as a heretical approach in conservative socities , is quietly becoming the 'new normal in a significant number of households , even in some part of east Asian socities . Instead of viewing this as a new cultural shift attacking the philosophical conservative views , we should embrace the change in our surroundings as one should be adaptable in life A change in this type of mindset between both the sexes (not inclusive of homosexuals ) , has fuelled an opposing view of the suggested opinion. This illustration shows us that both the sexes are must adapt themselves , irrespective of what the society is concerned
Of course , some would argue that whether women can accustom to such new challenging tasks after ages of managing household chores . The answer to this question would perfectly be answered by the fact that we can witness many women CEOs in our age of technology . This prove the fact that one should not be discriminated by their physical characteristics and more people subjected to such discrimination , must overcome this aspect . Failing to do so will be at their own peril
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, for example, for instance, of course, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2809.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94542253521 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87586958407 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485915492958 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 894.6 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.5660166765 60.3974514979 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.055555556 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5555555556 23.4991977007 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 60.0 7.80617977528 769% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238882080905 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908798530677 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122548532362 0.0758088955206 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169749488211 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988686730858 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.