The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.
Youth culture seems to be a prevailing culture in this day and age. It is debatable whether the most effective means to comprehend modern culture is to assess the trends of its youth. There are, however, many flaws in this method for several reasons.
To begin with, the trends of youth only have a minor contribution to the entire culture of a society. It will be an extremely arduous task to provide comprehensive depiction of culture nowdays only with youth culture. For example, drunk makeup was a popular youth trend in Japan for a while. Nevertheless, such makeup style was only done by a few youths which do not effectively represent the entire population. Also, currently widespread music trends like hip hop and electronic music are only demanded upon some youths, and the rest of the population do not care about such trend. On the other hand, musicals and operas represent more accurately of current culture with its plots and performances styles, but not much youths can enjoy such show due to costly ticket fees. Therefore, youth culture has a lot of limits regarding manifesting accurately of culture in this day and age.
Moreover, as longevity of life has been extended, trends of older people are becoming more influential. It is usually thought that youths are more involved in entertaining activities; nonetheless, with increase of older people, such notion has shifted. Golf culture, health related culture like sauna and herbal teas, and living culture have all impacted immensely by people who are not members of youth. In addition, renowned Korean television program, I live alone, features celebrities of 30s to 60s who live alone and can afford to live alone. Before, media mainly featured trends of youth, but with the increase of life expectancy, older people enjoy their lives more, thus having much more influence on the entire society. Therefore, deep apprehension of culture of all ages is needed especially in modern days.
Admittedly, in many cases, youth culture seems more trendy and new. However, in fact, youth, most of the times, are only emulating trends of its upper generation. With limited resources and experiences, youth culture is bounded with a lot of limitation; therefore, analysis of youth culture is insufficient in drawing wholesome picture of contemporary culture.
All in all, because of aforementioned reasons, youth trends fail to illustrate modern culture accurately. In order to have a comprehensive idea of culture of these days, more stratefied wherewithal should be employed.
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with increase of older people,
with the increase of older people,
youth, most of the times, are only emulating
youths, most of the times, are only emulating
Sentence: It will be an extremely arduous task to provide comprehensive depiction of culture nowdays only with youth culture.
Error: nowdays Suggestion: nowadays
Sentence: In order to have a comprehensive idea of culture of these days, more stratefied wherewithal should be employed.
Error: wherewithal Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: stratefied Suggestion: stratified
flaws:
Seems you limit the topic to age. We need to ask question for this topic: whether there is a causation between contemporary culture and the trends of its youth.
We may consider TLPE:
T means Time: the trends of its youth may change time by time. or have the same trend all the time.
L means Location: the trends of its youth in different country/city may be different
P means People: age matters. your paragraph 2/3
E means Event: Other than the youths, those conventions and traditions constitute the foundation of the contemporary culture.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 2063 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.019 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.693 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.036 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... plots and performances styles, but not much youths can enjoy such show due to costl...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'in many cases', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253731343284 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.127931769723 0.157235817809 81% => OK
Adjectives: 0.130063965885 0.0880659088768 148% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0831556503198 0.0497285424764 167% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0170575692964 0.0444667217837 38% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127931769723 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0362473347548 0.0406280797675 89% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79615719089 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0234541577825 0.030933414821 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0639658848614 0.0997080785238 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00852878464819 0.0249443105267 34% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00639658848614 0.0148568991511 43% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2548.0 2732.02544248 93% => OK
No of words: 411.0 452.878318584 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.199513382 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396593673966 0.366273622748 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.279805352798 0.280924506359 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192214111922 0.200843997647 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136253041363 0.132149295362 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79615719089 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 219.290929204 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540145985401 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 61.7727987917 55.4138127331 111% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5714285714 23.380412469 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4660507398 59.4972553346 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 141.124799967 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 23.380412469 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.674092028746 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 47.5519638512 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.83177570093 1.64882698954 111% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445650470608 0.391690518653 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0956683970527 0.123202303941 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0693408350989 0.077325440228 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.509440098352 0.547984918172 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130128382589 0.149214159877 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169233847212 0.161403998019 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135728961748 0.0892212321368 152% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.389460457729 0.385218514788 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0356522288314 0.0692045440612 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317974307169 0.275328986314 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838939447737 0.0653680567796 128% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 13.5995575221 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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