A Nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until the enter college
Education should be available to all and there should not be any discrimination on the basis of caste, religion, gender, social status, etc. This is a very important statement and should be implemented everywhere around the world for the betterment of the global society. The prompt makes a statement about the national curriculum and the compulsion for students to study it until they enter college. This is not a good idea because of two reasons.
First of all, the aforementioned "national curriculum" is a mere pastiche of all the subjects. Due to this, there is a lot of ground to cover in a very short time (only 1 academic year) which makes it difficult for the student to understand everything.
For example, there are five subjects namely Mathematics, Science, History, Geography, and Politics. These are just a few of a lot of subjects which the student actually studies. Now, the student faces the pressure of studying all of them and also acing in the subjects to match his or her parents' expectations. This hodgepodge makes the student confounded in a lot of ways.
Secondly, a student may not be liking a subject but he or she is forced to study it due to the curriculum. There is no freedom of choosing your subjects which can actually benefit the student in getting admits to colleges and even after college to make a great life. When a student is forced to study a particular subject which lies outside his or her liking, it feels like a huge burden on the student and it might end up worsening other subjects in which the student is actually interested. For example, a student does not like Mathematics but he is forced to study it which might include some very difficult topics like trigonometry, calculus, etc. Say, this student is interested in studying History which does not need any more math knowledge than simple addition, subtraction, multiplication, and division. Now the student is already feeling the burden of maths and not being able to perform well or even understand the subject, that particular student is not able to do well in History. This is only impacting the student in a negative way. The college which he is interested in applying to has some cut off and due to Mathematics, the student is not able to get marks above cut off. Ultimately, the student needs to compromise the college or maybe even History and learn something else for a better life, which may mean that the student is not completely happy.
In conclusion, making a student study a defined "national curriculum" is not a great idea, instead, there should be choices given to students and an committee should be set up to handle this aspect. The goal of education should not be burdening the student, instead should be a companion for a better life
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 29, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...of ways. Secondly, a student may not be liking a subject but he or she is forced to st...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1030, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ory. This is only impacting the student in a negative way. The college which he is interested in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1099, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'have'.
Suggestion: have
...e which he is interested in applying to has some cut off and due to Mathematics, th...
^^^
Line 8, column 157, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...should be choices given to students and an committee should be set up to handle th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83647798742 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89952492501 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463312368973 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9740604832 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268264257496 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853396587547 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672376920162 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15109677795 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491030921556 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 29, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...of ways. Secondly, a student may not be liking a subject but he or she is forced to st...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1030, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ory. This is only impacting the student in a negative way. The college which he is interested in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1099, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'have'.
Suggestion: have
...e which he is interested in applying to has some cut off and due to Mathematics, th...
^^^
Line 8, column 157, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...should be choices given to students and an committee should be set up to handle th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83647798742 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89952492501 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463312368973 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9740604832 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268264257496 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853396587547 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672376920162 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15109677795 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491030921556 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.