“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they
enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the
recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples
shape your position.
Although a nation and its people have many common shared values and goals,there are various groups in the citizenry of a nation that differ in ideologies and interests. Considering this, a nation may need all of its students to study the same curriculum to some extent, however, the curriculum should not overstep the lines of shared national interests and tread path in the unchartered territories of diverse and conflicting ideologies and interests. Besides, there should be scopes and opportunities to set up educational institutions and study subjects outside of the national curriculum so that people may keep their perceived identity without facing the troubled questions of national loyalty.
To elaborate on the statement presented in the introductory paragraph, let us first delineate and define the boundary of shared national interests and values. Throughout history there are some goals people have when they join a nation or become part of that nation. Primarily those goals, interests or values are safety of life and property, economic development and freedom to nurture one's self. In this context, nations set up state institutions and write laws and regulations that make sure public safety, an environment for economic development of the citizenry and an atmosphere of freedom and liberty. More or less, a majority of the citizens agree to this context, and are aware that they need to abide by the laws of the state and be productive to contribute to economic development of the nation. Therefore, a national curriculum, designed so that the new generation can learn basic skills to contribute productively to the wellbeing of the nation and play the role of the responsible and law-abiding citizens to ensure an overall surrounding of public safety, is an asset to the nation.
However, the goals of public safety and wellbeing may not be achieved rather will be deteriorated if the national curriculum forces upon the diverse segments of the citizens ideas and values that are contradictory to their declared identity. For example, although all the people should learn the official languages of the state, however, they should also be given adequate opportunities to learn and nurture their own mother tongue. Similar can be said about other aspects of cultures of different ethnicities of a nation. Moreover, religious or cultural ideologies of the majority should not be forced upon the minority in the name of national curriculum in any way which may even result in civil war and disintegration of the nation itself.
Hence, it is recommended that national curriculum consisting of shared goals and interests of the people should be taught to all the students keeping sufficient spaces of dissent for the divergent ideologies and interests of the various subgroups present in the nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...have many common shared values and goals,there are various groups in the citizenry of ...
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Line 5, column 387, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...omic development and freedom to nurture ones self. In this context, nations set up s...
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Line 13, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing sufficient spaces of dissent for the divergent ideologies and interests of th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28222222222 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9259747769 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 767.7 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4903343989 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.785714286 118.986275619 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1428571429 23.4991977007 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230197937725 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897053404347 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551466511508 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156954213449 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386518657277 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 14.1392134831 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.