As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
To say that technology has caused a deterioration in human cognition is to negate the ways in which technology has expanded the human potential for creativity and learning. At the same time, it is important to pay attention to the concerns related to excessive reliance on technology.
The main focus should be placed on how a person chooses to interact with technology. Is it used to simplify a task, or is it used to explore human potential? If the former, then we have the issue of the brain becoming too comfortable with relying on technology for assistance. One such example is the concern over the disappearance of Braille. Due to the abundance of audio books and audio lectures, there has been a decline in Braille proficiency. This can be problematic, because it limits the abilities for those who are visually impaired. Reliance on audio limits the ability for the blind to read on their own, and while audio media allows access to a wealth of knowledge, what it doesn’t do is allow the blind to fully delve into language, an experience that the brain craves.
Looking at the expansion of audio media can also be seen as a good thing, especially because of the amount of information that becomes available at the push of a button. Knowledge that was once only accessible through the passage of university doors is now open to anyone who simply seeks information. Audio media is not limited to audio books. Professors from established universities are able to share their lectures through the iTunes Store and Audible, and with just a couple of dollars, the layman can learn about black holes and the rise of Alexander the Great.
From this perspective, it can be seen that technology can benefit the consumer by providing them with easy access to knowledge, but the benefits don’t end there. The producer can also benefit. Going back to the professors who upload their lectures online, it can be seen that those who want to share thoughts and information are also able to allow their minds to be stimulated by the presence of technology. Continuing this idea, audio media goes beyond the books and the lectures that were previously discussed. Audio media includes podcasts, where individuals can unleash their creativity while sharing their knowledge with others. Experts in a field can hone their skills, and on top of being able to talk about what they specialize in, they develop a new skill along the way - production. They learn to write scripts that are in the vernacular, so that their podcasts can be enjoyed broadly. They learn to work with audio quality and editing, expanding their horizons of their creativity along the way.
Technology has the potential to better the human mind, but it depends on how the human utilizes it. When technology is used only as a mental shortcut, yes, it can weaken cognition. But when it is used to access knowledge and create, the mind is able to go on journeys that it has never been on before.
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| 2020-01-08 | mckvabhishek | 50 | view |
| 2019-08-29 | Amey Waghmode | 66 | view |
| 2019-08-28 | rhassan | 16 | view |
| 2019-08-15 | Pujan Biswas | 66 | view |
| 2019-08-15 | Pujan Biswas | 66 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 5, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ssive reliance on technology. The main focus should be placed on how a person choose...
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Line 5, column 223, Rule ID: COMFORTABLE_WITH_VBG[1]
Message: Use simply 'comfortable relying'.
Suggestion: comfortable relying
...ave the issue of the brain becoming too comfortable with relying on technology for assistance. One such ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2474.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87968441815 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70169617524 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495069033531 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1447022289 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.083333333 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 5.21951772744 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0854520985697 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279735464051 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423377389462 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0631428429955 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455140622587 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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