As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
The author argues that human intellectual abilities have declined due to technological advancement. In fact, as technology has progressed, we have come to use many tools, and some intellectual capacities that are no longer needed have been replaced by machines. But has all intellectual capacity declined? I think that technological progress has actually enhanced our intellectual capacity. As technology advances, we need to learn more, and society becomes more complex, requiring more intellectual capacity from us.
Simple, repetitive intellectual capacities do seem to have declined. This is because many of these abilities have been replaced by technology in both personal life and corporate work. For example, in a company, there is no longer a need to memorize numerous client contacts, and complex scheduling does not need to be done by a person. Computers now store all contacts and calendar software manages everyone's schedules optimally. In personal life, simple intellectual capacities no longer need to be exerted directly. Unlike in the past, where one had to calculate financial situations, now household accounts can be easily managed with Excel. When cooking, there is no need to remember recipes. Most of these capacities have been replaced by electronic devices. In this environment, our simple intellectual capacities, such as calculation and memorization, seem to have declined.
But can we say that our intellectual abilities have decreased due to technological advancement? I judge that in several aspects, our intellectual capacities have actually been strengthened. First, let's look at our education. Due to technological developments, we have to learn more and continue learning. The amount of education required in schools has also become more complex. Elementary school students in Korea now have to learn algorithms and computer skills in school. Nowadays, even college students in social science fields need to learn basic coding. This is also true after graduating from school. Workers need to learn new technologies created at an astonishing rate. Due to the fourth industrial revolution and the AI revolution, workers need to predict changes in the corporate environment due to new technologies. Technological change requires us to develop more intellectual capacities.
Moreover, considering the development of corporations and the highly connected society we live in, we have to think and reason about more things. The problems of one company or country are no longer limited to that company or country. When a typhoon occurs in South America, it affects the agricultural market in Japan, and when an earthquake occurs in Taiwan, semiconductor factories in Korea have to stop operating. To make business decisions, more considerations need to be taken into account. Diplomacy has also increased in complexity due to the development of communication and transportation. The influence between countries has become more powerful, and the identity of a nation must be determined by considering the influence of neighboring countries. In such a complex society brought about by technological advancement, we need to develop higher intellectual capacities.
In conclusion, as technology advances, we need to possess higher levels of intellectual capacities, and we are actually acquiring these capacities through personal life and corporate work. Rather than worrying that human capacity is declining due to the adoption of technology, we should consider how we can more quickly acquire and utilize technology to stay ahead in an increasingly complex society.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3057.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 544.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61948529412 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25327504586 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494485294118 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 987.3 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7146421902 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9117647059 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26470588235 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153229096237 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451357701759 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565213311443 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10285679378 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049525657672 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.02 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 100.480337079 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3057.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 544.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61948529412 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25327504586 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494485294118 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 987.3 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7146421902 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9117647059 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26470588235 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153229096237 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451357701759 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565213311443 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10285679378 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049525657672 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.02 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 100.480337079 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.