The existence of the freedom in the choices have been discussed for a long time. The chaotic nature of the environment lead the sides to be in a endless conflict. With this continuous discussion, som argue that the individual is free to choose without being under impression of the environment. In other words, freedom of choice is possible although there are many uncontrollable factor in the nature. For instance, the decision of walking can not be related to any factors other than the decisiveness of the individual. However, this argument ignores pervasively observed reality in a such byzantine world that has various types of layers of variable that can't be manipulated by an individual. In other words, stochasticity existed in the nature makes it impossible to make independent choices. The individuals don't able to alter conditions freely because of the existence of the possibilities.The forces of the nature caused by the endless ways of existence of the events have more control in the decisions of the individuals.
To begin with, since all of the events arises various kinds of results that can lead the condition in a different way, forces of the nature should be in a prior position to manipulate the individuals intentions. For example, decision of walking is actually dependent on the current hormonal levels of the individuals. If that individual is under the control of adrenaline which makes him to feel unsafe, the decision of changing place by walking becomes a must for that individual unintentionally. Not surprisingly, the level of hormones are not available to control, so the individuals are prompt the results of the events that can't be controlled. For giving another example, the employee who have waken up lately because of the breakdown of the telephone alarm should need to commute to work by spending less time on the car drives fast. And the pedestrian on the crossroad should move fastly because of that fast car. Therefore the decision of moving fast caused by the rapid car is not actually taken by the individual. Instead, the breakdown of the alarm which can't be controlled causes that decision. That is not to say that free-will doesn't play a role on the decisions. They naturally be a factor while we are deciding since the emotions are a vital part of the decison-making process. However, what I want to say is the free-will also prompt to be manipulated because of uncontrolled set of possibilities.
At the same time, some might argue that the individuals are able to change the unintenioally taken behaviours with their own. In other words, a pedestrian who feels that she is in a need of moving fast because of the rapid car may resit to that desire. She may be stuck on the road without considering the possibility of injuries. As a result, one may suggest that the people can change their destinies with the help of further thoughts. However, the desire of living will most probably defeats the idea of controlling the behaviours. Increased level of hormones which tries to save the body will make the individual to move away without giving decisions to the rational thoughts. Therefore, the control will not be in the individual for that situation.
Though, many feel that the individuals are free to make decisions because there is nobody to tell them to behave in that way. However, the factors that manipulates us are more structural are inresistible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... the environment lead the sides to be in a endless conflict. With this continuous...
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...he environment lead the sides to be in a endless conflict. With this continuous ...
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Suggestion: factors
... although there are many uncontrollable factor in the nature. For instance, the decisi...
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...arious types of layers of variable that cant be manipulated by an individual. In oth...
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...ke independent choices. The individuals dont able to alter conditions freely because...
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...e of the existence of the possibilities.The forces of the nature caused by the endl...
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...the individuals. To begin with, since all of the events arises various kinds of results ...
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... of results that can lead the condition in a different way, forces of the nature should be in a pr...
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...e prompt the results of the events that cant be controlled. For giving another examp...
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... another example, the employee who have waken up lately because of the breakdown of t...
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...d move fastly because of that fast car. Therefore the decision of moving fast caused by t...
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...stead, the breakdown of the alarm which cant be controlled causes that decision. Tha...
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...sion. That is not to say that free-will doesnt play a role on the decisions. They natu...
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...ndividual for that situation. Though, many feel that the individuals are free to make d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 14.8657303371 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 99.0 58.6224719101 169% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2838.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 571.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97022767075 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94195854179 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448336252189 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 911.7 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.337444227 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.357142857 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3928571429 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46428571429 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0855237416041 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0250583502658 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0272871215483 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0537612755325 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237821906932 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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