People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
behavior is a response of the person towards external stimuli. it is inevitable to build up people’s behavior. However, considering it is a sole reason for the behavior of people signifies the lack of scrutiny in the field of behavioral science. In my opinion, external factors do play to build a behavior of an individual but the issue had no regard for the other factors which is equally important as it is.
the behavior of the person is affected by the external cause to some extent but, never fully governed by this external force alone. people have different psychological state of mind so, on the presence of even similar stimuli, their response will be entirely different. the response of the external factors may be similar consequences but they are dealt with a different style as per person. For instance, a scientist has conducted a different social experiment, in the past, to find out their response in a similar stimulus. In doing so, they were able to find out that different people behave differently in the same environment. The denial of the claim again bolsters by the past iconoclastic people like Nelson Mandela who continually resist the racism against black while many people at that time were compelled to succumb it rather than protesting it. if the force were only factors for determining individuals' behavior, this result of the freedom would not have existed in the present tells how factors existed. Thus, the view of people's behavior is largely determined by forces, not of their own making is little absolute.
On the other hand, people's behavior is certainly relying on an inherent character of the human and not its imposed force. Many people grow with different mental state, ideology, and behavior even though similarly they raised together. If force alone has that capacity to build human behavior, all people of the same place should have the same behavioral response but, it is not prevalent. Society perceived similar kinds of the law, but some people freely adopt it while some reject it. Similarly, some people loves to dispose toward crime while others lean towards morality even in the same society. thus, the claim may overestimate the issue about the behavioral reason.
In conclusion, people have affected by the external factor but, the totality of its impact is absurd in human behavior. There are many other factors govern the behavior that the claim holds to ignore. it would have been better to consider the factors besides external force to get knowledge about human behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, similarly, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03800475059 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61546401115 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498812351544 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3880187437 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180267635154 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637405530767 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350175693598 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116918265938 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362716355448 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.