The author of the prompt has argued that people's behaviour are largely determined by forces that are beyond their control. In a qualified sense, I agree with this general proposition. In this essay, I highlight the reasons as to why most people's behaviour are predetermined, while also noting the exception to this general phenomenon.
First, it is clear that our customs have a deep effect on our behavioural patterns. That is to say that our method of approaching particular matters in life are predetermined by the culture in which we grow up. I do not believe that it is chauvinistic to say that certain cultures are better than others in certain matters;work ethics is perhaps a great example. Indeed, in certain cultures, people are encouraged to be hardworking, whereas other cultures are more lax when it comes to physical labour. Thus, if we find ourselves unsuccessful in the long term, we can perhaps blame our cultural upbringing for not having instilled within us the urge for success, that is, the urge to work diligently and audaciously.
Second, it is undoubtedly the case that economic realities inevitably pre-determine our behavioural patterns in life. An individual growing up in a elitist family will not be the same as any other individual in society. In most scenarios, it is the case that the former is more prone to arrogant and bossy behaviour than the latter whose life remains untouched by the negative aspects of upper-class societies. At the same time, it is also the case, that an upbringing in a relatively poor society can instill within us a sense of animosity for those who are more fortunate than us; it can make us envy everything in life because we have so little to begin with, so little to be content with.
On a final note, I should admit that certain societies can undermine the cultural and economic effects on our behaviour. This is only possible through state-wide liberal arts education that compels students to think outside the box. In fact, I am convinced that it is only when we are exposed to a wide variety of literature that we can overcome the obstacles of culture and economics. By being acquainted with moral literature- whether philosophical or religious,-and by reading about the pressing issues plaguing the world, we can control our behaviour for the better.
Overall, however, it remains the case that cultural and economic realities, that remain beyond our control, pre-dispose us to certain forms of behavioural patterns; but, by acquiring a liberal arts education, we can overcome these seemingly uncontrollable factors in our lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: , -and
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, thus, whereas, while, as to, in fact, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05092592593 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93761947777 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5126691173 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.352941176 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4117647059 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0651473214532 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263525497601 0.0831039109588 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362399998681 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0416567548933 0.150359130593 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424252239435 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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