A person should always be held accountable for his crimes and should be given punishment according to the seriousness of his crime. The statement here claims that any person who commits a crime should not retain any civils rights should not receive any benefits from his or her own labor. I think this is a very strong statement to make without considering the underlying crime of the criminal. hence I disagree with the claim and I would put forth my reasons below.
Firstly the amount of punishment given to any criminal breaking any social, political laws should depend on the crime. For eg, the crime of match-fixing in cricket is comparatively a mild one wherein the criminal is banned from playing cricket now if the above claim is applied here he/she would lose all social rights and their earnings. This seems too harsh a punishment for such a minor crime. The famous cricketer Ajay Jadeja was charged with match-fixing in 1998. But now he can be seen in cricket talk shows, and experts forums sharing his knowledge if he were socially ostracized people wouldn't have benefited with his knowledge.
Secondly, if a criminal is deprived of his or her earnings their children would also be deprived of their parent's income .which in fact would leed in them to follow their parent's path in crime. The offspring and depending families of these criminals haven't done anything legally wrong and they should have a basic right to their parent's income.
Hence I would like to conclude by saying that the criminals of minor crimes should not be stripped of their social rights as these things help them to come to fold and improve their lives and the criminals shouldn't also be deprived of their labor as the money they have earned is legal and their offspring and family members have the legal to gain from their income.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, i think, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 315.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80952380952 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42645202676 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.9129762289 60.3974514979 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322945560502 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124566162184 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165054658987 0.0758088955206 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201140760802 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143444634325 0.0667264976115 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.8420337079 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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