The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
This era is of developing technological advancement.Technology is becoming an important aspect of human life.Everyday, new products are being launched in market which helps human beings to perform their activities in a efficient way.In my views, the primary purpose of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so they have more leisure time and this leisure time can be used to work which is more important.
Consider a scenario where a manufacturer has to sell Pencils.If he is not using technology to manufacture the pencils it will take huge time to deliver his products.It will be a very tedious job to do this whole process of manufacturing manually which will include designing the pencils,checking it's quality,calculating the number of pencils and many other process which involves it completes packaging. Instead of doing this manually if technology is used then it will reduce the effort and time required to produce the material. Therefore, human labor will get more leisure time to focus on other works.This will help in more developments as people will get more time to focus on other activities.
Nowadays, communication is a very crucial aspect of human life.For, most of the activities performed in day to day life communication is very necessary.If a person has to talk to his friends and family when he is not with them cellphone is required.Also, when a person is working in a office and some information needs to be broadcast-ed mails or announcements are required which saves a lot of time of any person.It will be very difficult to go to each and every person desk to give the same information.This increases the efficiency of a person making him more productive in less time and giving him leisure time which can be utilized in his other office work.
Moreover, earlier people were bound to go to shop to buy any stuff. This practice has been now been reduced, as many online shopping portals are there which will deliver the products at your doorstep.This proves that people can use there time more effectively in some other place which they used to spend in shopping or other such activities.
Hence, from the above evidences it can be implied that technological advancement not only saves time but increases efficiency of humans as for using technology in such a way that it takes the least time they have to use their brain.Apart, from this in the leisure time people can focus on other work which requires more attention comparatively which will help in more development of our society.Therefore, primary goal of using technology should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'as for', 'as to', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235421166307 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.215982721382 0.157235817809 137% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0928725701944 0.0880659088768 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0539956803456 0.0497285424764 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0496760259179 0.0444667217837 112% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0907127429806 0.12292977631 74% => OK
Participles: 0.060475161987 0.0406280797675 149% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.19997634722 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0496760259179 0.030933414821 161% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0799136069114 0.0997080785238 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.036717062635 0.0249443105267 147% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0280777537797 0.0148568991511 189% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2678.0 2732.02544248 98% => OK
No of words: 441.0 452.878318584 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07256235828 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.315192743764 0.366273622748 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249433106576 0.280924506359 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.185941043084 0.200843997647 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142857142857 0.132149295362 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19997634722 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 219.290929204 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.7725574668 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6194690265 39% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 55.125 23.380412469 236% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 194.084871899 59.4972553346 326% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 334.75 141.124799967 237% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.125 23.380412469 236% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.375 0.674092028746 204% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.21349557522 441% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 80.0683106576 51.4728631049 156% => OK
Elegance: 1.20945945946 1.64882698954 73% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433369766017 0.391690518653 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.15159940959 0.123202303941 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0720428374996 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.779089754473 0.547984918172 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.211919946983 0.149214159877 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.225126681078 0.161403998019 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145576607581 0.0892212321368 163% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304648786051 0.385218514788 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0641060653567 0.0692045440612 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298354167225 0.275328986314 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144731479792 0.0653680567796 221% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 13.5995575221 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.