Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The issue of whether or not scandals are useful to focus our attention on problems better than a speaker is a very contentious one. While each side has its one strength and weakness, I believe that scandals are useful for focusing our attention on problems, because insult is better approach than advice to correct people. Furthermore, scandal can force people to rethink about their problems.
First, It is human nature that when people get insulted rather than a qualified advice, they focus more on their problems. Most people think that they are right and there is no significant reason to correct themselves. In addition, people do not want to hear about their problems and advice from others. Whenever a scandal occurs, it is potentially detrimental for related person and must be ignominious for him. Sometimes, scandal can be the cause of a person to be punished. As a result, scandal indirectly forces people to think about their problem. For example, someone takes bribes and he knows that it is a crime but he does not care until it becomes a scandal. After then he is forced to think about his bribery, because of the disapproval of his society and fear of punishment.
Some may argue that scandals are not always true and it may cause from rumors which gives people fallacious blame, so there is nothing to focus on. This point is flawed because the main objective is to focus on their own problems. If the scandal is based on rumours that does not mean that the person is completely innocent. Moreover, he will be precarious about his other problems so that no further scandal occurs.
In conclusion, nobody is perfect, everybody has problems and it is their duty to minimize it. Scandal may have it's own problem but it can be helpful for people to identify and focus on their own problems. For these reasons, scandal are useful more than a speaker.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue of whether or not scandals are useful to focus our attent...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...ty and fear of punishment. Some may argue that scandals are not always true and i...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tive is to focus on their own problems. If the scandal is based on rumours that do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 323.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79876160991 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52212743928 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510835913313 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3955745092 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.1111111111 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9444444444 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 5.13820224719 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278926854789 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941537633287 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746440058647 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191604338776 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657137087287 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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