School should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
The issue of whether the school should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood or they should
focus more on academic aspect of student is debatable one. Author asserts that school should focus more on preparing them
for the non-academic aspects of life which they will actually need in future.On the other hand this might affect academic performance
of a student. However, in the final analysis I agree with the author's claim as it has more advantages.
A main reason that, when school ends and student enters into adulthood very small population would be using what they have learnt in school
as part of their academics.However,skills which they will actually need after entering into the real world and what they have never learnt
in their school will be required.For example, Robert Kiyosaki, author of very famour book 'Rich Dad Poor Dad' says that the reason
why people who are academically very brilliant and are doctors and engineers, struggle with the financial crises at some point of life.
This is due to lack of financial education which they have not learned at any point in their life.School might teach how to earn money
but more imporatant thing is how to manage money.
Another compelling reason supporting author's opinion is that, Age range 8-16 is period where a person might afford
to make a mistake and learn from it. however, academics burdens student with so much pressure that they are discouraged
to innovate and research in the field they like.Telling example of it is of, Dhirubhai Ambani was an Indian business tycoon
and founder of Reliance business industries.Instead of not getting proper formal education he was able succeed in his life after failing multiple times.
if school focuses more on non-academic aspects, students at later stage in their life would be able to handle financial crises well
and hence, would live a better life.
Although,it's true that student must have a strong foundation of maths and scinece when he/she leaves school.but this should not come
with a cost of ignoring non academic aspect of life which will cost them for lifetime.
To sum up,while there are arguments to be made from both sides it is clear that there are greater advanatges in a view that
school should prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.hence I agree with author's viewpoint.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12755102041 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78203015711 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533163265306 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.660381691 60.3974514979 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 201.0 118.986275619 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.2 23.4991977007 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 5.21951772744 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.97078651685 402% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464383278969 0.243740707755 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.225092117833 0.0831039109588 271% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.228803567181 0.0758088955206 302% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154128253203 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.211386996612 0.0667264976115 317% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 14.1392134831 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.