"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
In this augument the author urge to state that by increasing quantity of domitories in Buckingham college it will more likely to result in enrollment for procpective students. To support his recommendation he states that there is a linear increase in rate of enrollment of students in college which will more likely to be double in upcoming 50 years. I find this argument unconvincing for some reasons.
First, Buckingham Collage is situated in the heart of city; at the centre, so there is no a dearth for accomodation for students attending the college and students applying for next year. There are phethlora of off-campus accomodations available around it. Current Off-campus students, some are living in rented apartments where they usualy divide their rent with number of occupancies and it turns out to be cheaper than dormitories. There are thirty percent of students who have the residence in the same city, thereafter, would not be needing any on-campus housing facilities. Many are even comfortable living off-campus as, being health concious, they can make their own food and are not imposed to pay for there food in dormitories which seems expensive. Also there are cleaning and security fee that are compulsory for every students living in on-campus. Therefore, it is presumption to say that building up new dormitories will result in increase for on-campus house which prospective students will prefer.
Second, author speculated that increasing in housing for collages will attract freshmen students but forgets to discuss the cost incur for building it. It is equally possible to assume that the college do not have the necessary funds to act upon this decision. Yearly, the college organise a science competition where Research work of Undergraduate and post-graduate students is evaluated which is an expensive event and perhaps, because of that, college is in debt from the corporate loans they have taken from the bank. Also after building up of new dormitories there will be a need of new staff for house keeping , accounts, warden, etc to maintain it where college have to pay ther salaries and other allowance. It seems to me that it is not very cost effective way for the college to be a showcase to the upcoming students about their new dormitories.
Finally, I agree that new shinny dormitories will enhance the look for the collage and put a new face for the upcoming students and will help to convince parents to send their child to the collage but again, this college stands as one of the best college in the town and has the reputation increrase in published research work which seems sufficient to impress the prospective students.
In conclusion, this argument is vague and ambiguous. Author must at very least should provide the statistics of reasonable cost for new planned dormitories in comparison to offf-campus apartments and could create a survey for both , current and upcoming students to ensure whethere there is a real need for increasing the on-campus housing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, look, second, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2525.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12170385396 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83838455732 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488843813387 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.4007954886 60.3974514979 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.277777778 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3888888889 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185996613615 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629003979852 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494859889408 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113865109739 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282292953727 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.