Society consists of two groups - one group which manages the mass and another group are the mass
Society consists of two groups - one group which manages the mass and another group are the mass.So, there should be good communication between these two groups for the success of the society.The prompt recommends that the well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.I agree with argument as people's voice plays in crucial role in shaping the society for two main reasons.
To begin, the government might think that the policies which they implemented are going perfectly as they expected, i.e., they might implement some new policies on taxes, but this new policy might be causing some serious problems for the masses. For example, if the government implements some policy wherein the people need to pay 30 percent of their salary, which they earn every year, without taking consideration of the amount of the salary the person earning - this will by all odds create heavy financial problems for the ones who are making salary less than the average salary. Let's say if a person earns about 10k dollars per year, so utterly this individual needs minimum of 9k dollars to lead his/her life and if 30 percent of their salary goes to tax then they will be left with only about 7k dollars which is about 2k dollars less than the amount which he/she need to lead a normal life, with 7k he/she might be unable to afford the even canonic needs of life like food and shelter.Thus, careful scrutiny of any policy is required which can merely happen when people vox their concerns related to the policies , so in this way the government will be cognizant of any new policies which they are trying to enforce.When people query these matters the government has to provide them with valid reasons for their moves, thus , next time when the government implements any such policy they will make sure all these worries of people are satisfied and their policy should be aiding multitude to shape a better society.Thus,people's voice plays in an important factor in building the society in a better way.
Further, people's voice plays a vital role in making decisions. For illustration, consider there is some big upcoming project and the manager in the IT firm suggests and builds an idea, but his idea might be having several flaws which he might be unaware of. So, in this situation if the people in the team won't question his ideas then manager will be never be able to identify the flaws in the suggested plan but when a teammate queries on the flaws of this plan , manager can explain his view and if there are flaws then this could be definitely fixed.Thus, here people's vox is making a great impact on the product quality and thus making the product more efficient with less faults.Another example, consider that the government is planning to construct a nuclear power plant at a hilly area where several tribal people are domiciling in and also these people are entirely dependent on this forest for the food and shelter. If the government constructs the power plant then these tribal people will definitely suffer because nuclear power plants release chemicals which are high-risk for nature and for the people who are staying there. The chemicals released from these power plants will cause severe respiratory and other health issues which will lead into the regimen spending more money on the health of these affected people, which will further deteriorate the financial stability of the government. But, if people have questions about these worries before the construction of a power plant then these people and a lot of money would be saved. Thus, people's voice aids the wellbeing of a society.
Admittedly, people's voice won't matter in all decisions.For example, the coach might replace the captain of team, who is aged but has competence to play well with a player who is young and also good at the game.Here, questioning the coach's decision is not a good idea since it's practical to give chance to the young players and that is how everyone gets a fair opportunity to learn and play.Nonetheless, these forms of situations are rare when compared to those where people's voice are really important.Thus, people should question whenever they feel that something is not good which would definitely aid in the wellbeing of the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, nonetheless, really, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.3162921348 256% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3562.0 2235.4752809 159% => OK
No of words: 723.0 442.535393258 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92669432918 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.18542759274 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57843391592 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 328.0 215.323595506 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453665283541 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1081.8 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 60.0 23.0359550562 260% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 276.954406095 60.3974514979 459% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 296.833333333 118.986275619 249% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 60.25 23.4991977007 256% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145513868013 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639013242615 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146230067644 0.0758088955206 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159165508654 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.223959022387 0.0667264976115 336% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.9 14.1392134831 226% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 19.04 48.8420337079 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 12.1743820225 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.8971910112 227% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.0 11.2143820225 232% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.7820224719 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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