We have often heard the inspirational phrase that ‘You are the best at being you’. Every child is unique in their own way. The prompt recommends that the society should identify children with special talents and train them at an early age to hone those skills. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that society should do a better job at identifying talent in children for two reasons.
To begin, generic training doesn’t particularly help children. ‘One shoe does not fit all’. Since early childhood up to adolescence, all children are roughly provided the same training irrespective of their natural talents. For instance, a student who might be exceptional at dancing is forced to study mathematics and science even he doesn’t find any joy in it. Whereas, his dancing might be regarded as a ‘waste of time’ by his teachers and parents which must be curtailed in order to improve his grades. Due to this, the child may start thinking that his passion is wrong and would force himself to quit dancing and spend that time cramming subject information. This may lead to a build up of resentment and frustration inside him which would ultimately affect his self-confidence. He may stop voicing out his inner thoughts in front of his parents and guides for the fear of being reprimanded and become a closed book. If such a scenario occurs, it would lead to the child being unhappy as well as his talent not being developed. Instead of pursuing a career in a thing that he loves and brings him delight, he might find himself struggling in another course which he abhors, thus ultimately lowering his quality of life.
Further, not developing such talents leads to a wastage of potential. The child might be a prodigy in their respective field which could in future, if he is trained properly, bring him, his family, and even his country, honour and pride. For instance, if Sachin Tendulkar would not have received cricket training in his teen years and instead been forced to pursue engineering, would the world of cricket ever have received such a gem? Sachin’s family and teachers recognized his potential and encouraged him to pursue his talent diligently, which enabled him to become a legend in the sport and inspire millions of other children with such a dream. By listening to his heart and working tirelessly on what he truly excelled at, he was able to bring glory to his country. Had he not worked on his talent and pursued generic academic training, the world might currently not even know his name.
Of course, some argue that in our increasingly globalized economy competition for jobs has vastly increased and thus it is pragmatic that we pursue practical paths. But shouldn’t this precisely be why children’s inherent talents should be acknowledged and they should be trained accordingly? So that they can compete in this cut-throat world efficiently, carve out a niche for themselves, and do the best job possible.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...y in their respective field which could in future, if he is trained properly, bring him, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, may, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, of course, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2485.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96007984032 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71410704033 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540918163673 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7199910361 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.043478261 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7826086957 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268865908169 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841970891602 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117031244438 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201855731811 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159448880655 0.0667264976115 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...y in their respective field which could in future, if he is trained properly, bring him, ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, may, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, of course, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2485.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96007984032 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71410704033 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540918163673 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7199910361 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.043478261 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7826086957 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268865908169 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841970891602 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117031244438 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201855731811 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159448880655 0.0667264976115 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.