Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The speaker has asserted that millennials have to cooperate to lead the society across all fields. It has also been claimed that competition among young people can be deleterious to the growth of society. In my opinion, even though cooperation is very important to effectuate development, youth needs to compete amongst themselves to learn and expand their horizons. Hence, I partially disagree with the prompt and would like to reason with two arguments. Firstly, it is essential to observe the path that the world has followed since ancient times. Animals have always competed to survive, resulting in the passage of the best possible set of genes to the progeny. This has been thoroughly explained by Charles Darwin in his book 'The Origin of Species' which terms natural selection as one of the most important factors that contribute towards the conservation and development of a species in the ecosystem. Analogously, if the same concept is applied to modern human society, we can observe that human beings have always competed to survive. Competition always results in shaping the best possible outcome, thereby helping the advancement of society. In this case, leadership qualities excessively contribute to function better in high ranked jobs in the public and private sectors. Competition is the only possible way to weed out the average and select the best for the job, thus making it slightly more important than cooperation. On the other hand, one may also argue that excessive competition might lead to disputes in the work environment, resulting in decreased efficiency. If two eminent individuals working on a project, constantly argue and fight to gain the spotlight, it might lead to negligence of important work, due to an increase in focus towards petty issues. If the two individuals were brought up in a way, such that they concentrated on the greater good rather than on individualistic improvement, the project might have reached completion. Hence, it is appropriate to infer that excessive competition can be a bane to society. To sum up, the issue presented in this prompt is a contentious one. The society cannot live in the absence of either of the two, making both cooperation and competition essential for social development. Consequently, they must go hand in hand in hand in view of the bigger picture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'hand in'.
Suggestion: hand in
...development. Consequently, they must go hand in hand in hand in view of the bigger picture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, thus, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 380.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13684210526 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93745513315 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563157894737 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1590839053 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.444444444 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0897793787749 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261617016893 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0239570490576 0.0758088955206 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897793787749 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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