Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Art is not just like the study of all other subjects we generally pursue during our college or school days. Art is something different, it's not just dance or sketching or painting etcetra but it the study of origin of the various traits of the people of our community and passed on from generation to generation. There are various art form around the world like dances, mask making, sketching and so on. Out of these art form some are flourishing very well and some even have gone extinct. Govermantal support is really needed to promote these kind of rare arts and to make sure that everyone can be able to get in touch with it.
First of all, as the statement said governmental support is needed to flourish these art forms and provide oppurtunity to everyone to get a faceoff with these art forms. Let us consider the example of rare art of Kerala, India. It is the art of face mask making but it's not just any ordinary mask making rather these masks are made from the red mud found the southerm part of India and the masks are very abstract in nature. Today, only one family in India really know this art and this art is slowly going to extinction if somebody do not take initiative soon. These kind of art form are rare and need to passed on to the future generations. For this to happen, governmental support is needed to financially support them and to make sure their availibility to evreyone. So, that the coming generation can have all the required knowledge about their ancestors and their way of expressing themself.
But, on th contrary some people argue that giving financial support can distort the very basic integrity of arts. But these kind of allegations are complete false because the people supporting these allegations think that providing financial support will make make these art form just as common as other field of study in the schools and colleges. Besides, they do not understand that not supporting them can lead to it's complete extinction. People making these negative allegations also think that some of the people will start earning money as way of teaching these arts and the fundamental integrity of art that it should be learnt not by cost but by passion will be lost. But, we have to also look the other way round and to start thinking that it's important first to preserve them and after that we can tackle the problem of making art a commercial buisness.
In conclusion, I would like to say that it's really important for government to take initiative in this regard as soon as possible. We should have to be aware that some of these arts are getting ruled out from the society day by day. Some important step from the government is necessary to make sure the survival of these arts and make them available to everyone possible.
- Claim: Government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primary in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. 50
- Leaders are created from the demands that are placed on them. 50
- Laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances,times and places. 50
- Educational Institutions have responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing field of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 50
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problem in a way that no speaker or reformer ever could. 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, look, really, so, well, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65376782077 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45884151277 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441955193483 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7348972051 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.25 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.55 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288231336169 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101917846889 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509574816935 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197573916026 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157819908865 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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