Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of its entire people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
To evaluate a nation in terms of great it is, one must have an analytical look at many aspects of the nation that help him better assess the nation's greatness. In this context, people argue about what aspects or factors are more telltale about the welfare of a nation. that is, some people use the acievements of the rulers or artists to assess a nation, while others don not believe that this is an adequate indicator of how a nation is great and instead, they think that the welfare of the overall nation is best representative of the greatness of the nation.
thinking of the achievements of a nation as an indicator of the greatness may sometimes be misleading. that is, The field at which a nation excels and has achievements determines how these achievements will have an impact on the nation as total. A nation that for example is replete of artists that are the bes at their field of sculptures creation, will be highly-reputed of this and will have many achievements in that field. However, the excellence of this nation in this particular field, will difficultly have an impact on the nation's people financially or educationally. so, we can conclude that in this way of assessing, the nation's greatness significantly depends on the certain field they are renowned to be good at.
Moreover, considerable number of nations try their best in the long and short term to enhance the way the world look at them, so that they are more respected internatoinally. this is always done by the governments that don't want to be accused of any wrong-doing towards the people they govern, so they spread information about achievements they have done regardless the veracity of such achievements. Consequently, assessing a nation based on the achievements they are renowned for will be mislead. In other words, the information disseminated about one nation is always spread by the leaders of this nation, who are not by necessity reliable for the information they spread, given that the goodness of the information dispersed about them positively affect their ruling.
Finally, if we imagine a hypothetical nation that is characterized by the welfare of its people, it is very unlikely for this nation to not be great, as the welfare of any nation is not easily achieved and always determined by many factors that require a lot of hard work to achieve, and this makes the welfare of a nation's people a good indicator of the greatness of a nation.
In conclusion, we can not ignore the probable correlation between the achievements of rulers or artists of a nation and its greatnes. Nevertheless, it is not always plausible to use it as the only indicator of the greatness of the nation, as many factors impede doing that such as, the continuous tries of governments to ameliorate their look among the international society regardless how good they really are, and also, the achievements of a nation sometimes lies in a field that is hardly benefeting the people of the society and therefore, they are hardly called great in general.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in general, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2522.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88759689922 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95989749476 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.393410852713 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.913736539 60.3974514979 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.133333333 118.986275619 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4 23.4991977007 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 5.21951772744 226% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34166630818 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147606523688 0.0831039109588 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804151153336 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234730010209 0.150359130593 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832710388731 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.1392134831 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.