Today is the time when movie stars and sports stars are glorified to the level of super humans owing to their success. This exaltation makes some people to believe that the celebrities are also obliged to behave as role models to the youth in return of the fame and wealth accumulated as a result of the acceptance of common public.
Many movie and sports stars started their journey as poor and financially challenged but the advertisement contracts and similar opportunities owing to the love of public for them changed their fate forever. It is true that it is the love and good will of public who gives an elite status to sports and movie participants but does this justify the expectations of public from them to behave as roll models? Perhaps yes to some extent, as it is said "With great power comes great responsibility". If the powerful and famous would turn their backs on society, this would be a disaster for the morality. Many young people look at such famous celebrities and emulate them so closely to reach the similar social status. The impact of actions of these celebrities on youth is enormous and cannot be ignored. For example, a movie star smoking cigarettes also unintentionally encourages his naive fans to try smoking. They find it cool and a characteristic of success.
Despite of all above expectations, celebrities are entitled to live their life in complete freedom as normal humans do. Expecting them to behave in a manner that suits society is an attempt to curtail their liberties. They should not be expected to pretend to fulfill this moral obligation, instead youth and public should be made aware so that they do not follow celebrities blindly. Public should be intelligent enough to discern the right and wrong in their actions and should always draw motivation from their good deeds.
The willingness to give back to society is appreciable if it comes from within. For example, Sachin Tendulkar, a legendary cricketer never advertises products that he thinks are potentially harmful for the youth. Thus celebrities should not be put under pressure of fulfilling the social obligation but should be appreciated if they do so.
Thus in the conclusion, I believe the celebrities have the right to lead a life they think is best for them ignoring the expectations of the public but if they fulfill this obligation that actually makes them super humans
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun movie seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many movies'.
Suggestion: Many movies
...of the acceptance of common public. Many movie and sports stars started their journey ...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: MODAL_OF[2]
Message: It's never correct to use "of" after a modal verb. Use 'will have'.
Suggestion: will have
...It is true that it is the love and good will of public who gives an elite status to spo...
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Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...orality. Many young people look at such famous celebrities and emulate them so closely to reach th...
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Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... are potentially harmful for the youth. Thus celebrities should not be put under pre...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...should be appreciated if they do so. Thus in the conclusion, I believe the celebr...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'as a result', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229885057471 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.172413793103 0.157235817809 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0850574712644 0.0880659088768 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0505747126437 0.0497285424764 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.064367816092 0.0444667217837 145% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.11724137931 0.12292977631 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0344827586207 0.0406280797675 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8434429296 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0459770114943 0.030933414821 149% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0942528735632 0.0997080785238 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229885057471 0.0249443105267 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00689655172414 0.0148568991511 46% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2405.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 403.0 452.878318584 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.96774193548 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.344913151365 0.366273622748 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.235732009926 0.280924506359 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.156327543424 0.200843997647 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109181141439 0.132149295362 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8434429296 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501240694789 0.48968727796 102% => OK
Word variations: 55.0499136043 55.4138127331 99% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.3888888889 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2377087268 59.4972553346 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.611111111 141.124799967 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.674092028746 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 45.9620898814 51.4728631049 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.328 1.64882698954 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4718886453 0.391690518653 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100852591972 0.123202303941 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0902622568619 0.077325440228 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.530876603503 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.194019078104 0.149214159877 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172932436163 0.161403998019 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855128878089 0.0892212321368 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.370788992091 0.385218514788 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.089642860272 0.0692045440612 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312109064421 0.275328986314 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643630834356 0.0653680567796 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 13.5995575221 74% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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