Those who see their ideas through, regardless of doubts or criticism others may express, are the ones who tend to leave a lasting legacy.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
What kind of people leave behind legacies? What distinguishes people who are remembered in time? One of the common characteristics of such people is their ability to see what could be, beyond what is already existing. This is not an easy task, as they face criticism and jeering from the people who are unable to see what they are imagining. What separates really vsionary leaders from the rest is their ability to persist and lead their vision and ideas to a logical conclusion, while the rest of us might cave in to criticism and give up.
Ideas are something every one of us has on a daily basis. But there are only a few who are really able to take those ideas and build a lasting legacy for themselves. The traits that distinguish them from the rest are their ability to see what no one else is able to imagine, and their ability to persist with it even when people all around them are jeering them for it. One of the biggest entrepreneurial and cultural icons of our times is Steve Jobs. In the mid 2000s, he imagined a world where people will be using internet mostly from their hand-held devices and not bulky laptops. This was a time when smartphones were only considered the domain of business users, and no one really considered them to be useful for everyone from students to retired grandparents. The technology for such a device, which provided all the services of the internet along with the convenience and ease of use, did not exist. Their attempts at building such a device were mocked by their competitors and critics alike, saying that such a thing wasn’t achievable. Even if it was achievable, it wasn’t going to be popular. However, Jobs and his team imagined a different future. They persisted, and after multiple failed attempts, came up with the iPhone in 2007, which completely revolutionised how we communicate with each other. Jobs’ ability to persist with his vision and ignore the criticisms is what separated him and his company from his competitors, and etched his mark in human history forever.
The iPhone example also showcases how once the vision and the persisted idea becomes a reality, it offers the owner a position of leadership in the global scenario. This position of leadership inadvertantly ensures that their impact on humanity is long lasting. As a young boy, Bill Gates was writing computer programs when computers were isolated to a few research organisations. All of his batchmates at Harvard were working for high paying jobs in finance or insurance. He was mocked at for his interest in such a niche field, which no one imagined would be useful for the masses. However, Bill Gates’ vision of having everyone in the world use their personal computer led him to founding one of the biggest organisations in the history of humanity, Microsoft. Since then, a lot of other companies have also developed software, but no one can match the scale of microsoft because it ushered in a new era. This has led to Bill Gates being one of the richest men in the world till date, even after he donated much of his wealth for philanthropic causes.
While it is important to persist with your ideas, it is equally important to be able to discern when something is not working. As the popular aphorism goes, you can’t fight every dog on the streets. The ability to understand genuine criticism and pay heed to advice is an eqally important characteristic, which increases chances of success.
Lasting legacies are created by visionaries and leaders, who make the most impact on the human society. These people are able to see what no one else around them sees, and persist with their vision even when the going is tough. Their critics, unable to understand their visions, will criticise their actions. But the world only remembers those who persist despite these setbacks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... people who are unable to see what they are imagining. What separates really vsionary leaders...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, then, while, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3195.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 657.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86301369863 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06280665599 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67812014594 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471841704718 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 1026.0 704.065955056 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8083539408 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.84375 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.53125 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.96875 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191823089918 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504436517915 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309663018144 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114586794275 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316035567864 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 100.480337079 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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