I had two friends Amal and Kamal. We grew up together from preschool up unitl the end of the college. Amal had high expectations of himself, and had goals set up high. Kamal on the other hand did not have that much of expectations or goals for that matter. But he worked hard, he completed what he was given with merit, and always learn to grab opportunities and earn more. Amal on the other hand lived his life in his own utopia, where he did not revise his goals, pursued them with needed capacity. At the end of the college Amal had to stay for another year complete his work, where Kamal got the opportunity to work at a leading company in the industry. This scenario suggest that the mere setting of goals does not makes one successful. Rather pursuing them in the correct capacity, revising them when needed makes one successful. Also, even if you do not have any clear set goals, if you are able to grab the opportunities when they are on offer and strive to achieve the best in whatever you do, you are most likely to end up successful, like Kamal. It is with this argument at its core, I formulate my disagreement on the statement that the success can be measured primarily on the goals set. The disagreement here is most stressed on the words "primarily", and "goals one set" as opposed to goals one achieve.
In every presidential election season, the media become inundated with presidential candidates with lots of hopes for themselves and promises for their constituents and supporters. These people have set high goals for themselves; become the president of their country, and be the first citizen. Then again some may have comparatively lesser, but significantly high set goals like be popular in the society, which may help them in their future endavours, not necessarily political. Whichever the case we can agree that the goals they have set are high. But then, we see so many of thses candidates fail miserably; may be due to the lack of eloqounce that is needed in their respective campaigns, may be due to the lack of personality that attract crowd around them, etc. Whichever the case they embarrass themselves in national media, which is anything but success. Some candidate go way beyond that and get exposed to their past wrong doings, which may not have being revealed should they have set lesser but more suiting goals.
Measuring success is a highly subjective matter. But this should be done in a meaningfull way. An abstract and unrealized metric like set goals is definitely not a suitable measure.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 673, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
... company in the industry. This scenario suggest that the mere setting of goals does not...
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Line 1, column 721, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...that the mere setting of goals does not makes one successful. Rather pursuing them in...
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Line 1, column 743, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...of goals does not makes one successful. Rather pursuing them in the correct capacity, ...
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Line 1, column 1276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssed on the words 'primarily', and 'goals one set' as opposed...
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Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whichever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e endavours, not necessarily political. Whichever the case we can agree that the goals th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79185520362 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76552039012 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522624434389 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2741428605 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2727272727 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.45454545455 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252635393118 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692593446747 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528472463439 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149990193299 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415834356629 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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