Throughout the world, study in society has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although many people believe that major cities play a vital role in a society, the issue as to whether they may help researchers understand the most important characteristics of the society remains controversial. As far as I am concerned, to fully understand the characteristics of a society, people should learn about its major cities.
One cannot know about American without visiting New York or San Francisco: where people can see the numerous groups of citizens such as White, Black, Asian or Hispanic united or divided by ethnicity or religion. These are where you might hear hundreds of different languages, walking on the street. From the earliest days, America has been a nation of immigrants, starting with its original inhabitants, who crossed the land bridge connecting Asia and North America tens of thousands of years ago; then America experienced successive waves of immigration, particularly from Europe. At the present time, America is a melting pot due to its diversity, a notable city like New York is home to neighborhoods such as Little Italy, Chinatown, Spanish Harlem or Hell’s Kitchen, etc.
If you seek to understand the hierarchy of Indian’s society, you have to study New Delhi or Mumbai. Foreign visitors might see them as modern and wealthy cities, but they also have imbalance; although they are among the richest cities in the world, a huge amount of population live in slums, or areas of extreme poverty that often lack access to clean water, electricity, and public transportation. This disparity is prevalent due to the caste system; members of higher-ranking castes tend to be more prosperous than members of lower-ranking castes, who often endure poverty and social disadvantages especially Dalit, the lowest-ranking caste. In past decades, Dalit people had to display extreme deference to high status people and suffered from landlessness, unemployment and discriminatory practices. In recent years, it is illegal to openly advocate any caste’s superiority, lower-ranking caste citizens are still negatively affected by discrimination.
If you want to comprehend a conservative society with a Karoshi, overwork culture of Japan, you might need to go to Tokyo or Osaka. This intense culture is a product of Japan’s post World War II era, in an effort to rebuild the economy, the government enlisted major corporations to offer their employees lifelong job security, asking only that workers repay them with loyalty. The action worked and made Japan a second largest economy in the world due to the assiduousness of employees, they arrived early and left late, worked under pressured management and routinely did many hours of overtime. Despite the success of the nation, Japanese workers began committing suicide and suffering strokes or heart failure from the burden stress and sleep deprivation. Currently, even though the government has some policies to give people more time off but if foreigners come to big cities of Japan, they might see a huge number of Japanese rushing to their offices.
In conclusion, it is true that studying metropolises of a society leads to understand its most important characteristics. The living examples of America, India and Japan bear this out, their major cities illustrate their remarkable attributes.
- It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 56
- Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. 83
- Sending criminals to prison is not the effective method to deal with them. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extend do you agree or disagree? 11
- Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree? 67
- Sending criminals to prison is not the effective method to deal with them. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extend do you agree or disagree? 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ay a vital role in a society, the issue as to whether they may help researchers understand th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, still, then, as to, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2878.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 535.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37943925234 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05984790942 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 322.0 215.323595506 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601869158879 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 911.7 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6322306586 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.473684211 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1578947368 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205886208151 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641519620873 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101770984863 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138036744764 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133220486291 0.0667264976115 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 100.480337079 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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