I do not agree with the statement that an appealing image is more significant than the reality or truth behind that image at present, also it is unneccessary to have a pity on the phenomenon that the beautiful extrior of the images exceed those which have deep meaning inside the pictures. As my concern, no matter the ouside appearance or the reality or truth behind the image, they are all important today. We need to take the backgrounds of these images into account when we evalutating them. I will address as below.
To begin with, some images are merely beautiful while it is important for us. When we see the beautifull scenery painting on the canvas, it makes us happy and relaxed. Moreover, it is not important for us to know where the place is or how could we get there, these infromation was not essential at that moment. In some case, it would hurt people, when I saw the beautiful image of the islands, I was told that they are in the South China sea. I immediately rememebered the happy experince in Maldives with my wife at our honeymoon, unfrotuantely, the island we lived in was sunk in the Indian Sea due to the global warming. Even if this image in front of me was beautiful, while the memory in my mind hurt me as can not land the island of Maldives again. That is human nature, the melochanly hurts.
On the other hand , the reality or truth behind the image never is inferior to the appealing image. There are always some memories behind the image that an individual never forget, as for me, I am a fan of photograph, even if some of my images are not so appealing while they takes lots of my memories of happy and sad times. As for people, these memories accumulated together, that is history. Nowadays, there are so many meaningfull images in the world. There was one shocked me recently was a body of child decumbent on the beach of France. He was a refuge from Syria. During the smugling , he did not survive on the sea and died. I really appreciate this image as it takes lots of reality and truth. The war, the refuges, the child, the open border in Europe. These meanings beyond the picture would be remembered by the people today and in the future like thousands of images like this in the history. The one who ignores the history, said by our ancestors, can not embrace the future.
In addition, I contends there are some basic rules to evalute the apppearance of images. From outside, we could analzye the work of the artist by the appealing lines and colors. While we should examine those which were put in some certain historical events from inside, also some times both like Mona Lisa. Thus, there is no need to judge which one is more important. As for me , if the image is good , it would be famous no matter due to the outside appearance or the reality or truth inside it,or both.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ning inside the pictures. As my concern, no matter the ouside appearance or the r...
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Message: Are you missing a verb?
...that they are in the South China sea. I immediately rememebered the happy experince in Maldives with my...
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Suggestion: ,
...e melochanly hurts. On the other hand , the reality or truth behind the image n...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is never
..., the reality or truth behind the image never is inferior to the appealing image. There ...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'take'
Suggestion: take
... images are not so appealing while they takes lots of my memories of happy and sad ti...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...a refuge from Syria. During the smugling , he did not survive on the sea and died....
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'contend'
Suggestion: contend
...t embrace the future. In addition, I contends there are some basic rules to evalute t...
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Suggestion: ,
...e which one is more important. As for me , if the image is good , it would be famo...
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Suggestion: ,
...ortant. As for me , if the image is good , it would be famous no matter due to the...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , or
...arance or the reality or truth inside it,or both.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, really, so, thus, while, as for, as to, in addition, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49416342412 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44846405381 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470817120623 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 6.24550561798 336% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.6097985493 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5555555556 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.037037037 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178548699532 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458241731867 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638290098251 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125533741108 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764413781432 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.1392134831 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.