We venerate loyalty - to our schools, employers, institutions, friends - as a virtue. Loyalty, however, can be at least as detrimental an influence as it can be a beneficial one.
The author raises a controversial issue of whether loyalty influence people in a detrimental way or in a beneficial way.
First of all, in any relationship loyalty plays a vital role. I would like to point out that in every relationship be it is between partners, between children and parents, employee and employers loyalty is a virtue that people crave for. For example, a person who is not loyal to his wife can end up in a huge problem when her spouse will know about the relationship from any other source. This may even end up in a divorce as the wife may never trust her husband again. In this circumstance, obviously being loyal to any relationship will make it profound and trustworthy.
Furthermore, loyalty can make people more praiseworthy than others. As a palpable example, Steven Gerrard a football player from Liverpool has played most of his matches in his childhood local club. And people nearly worship him in his club because of his constant performance and loyalty even though his one miss pass has cost them a league title once. There are some other players who are as agile and adept like him on the pitch but his loyalty makes him one of the most followed players in the world. Both common sense and past knowledge told us that if any traits of a human being can win many peoples heart then it must be the most benevolent attribute any man can possess.
Admittedly, it has many disadvantages in many cases. This is true, especially when it comes to any malpractices conducted by any organization or government. As a tangible example, let's look at the of the commanders under Hitler. Though the heinous steps taken by Hitler during the world war is not supported by his commanders, they are bound to adhere his orders. But these arguments do not lend strong support to the argument of loyalty may influence people in a detrimental way as well.
In conclusion, although there are certain deleterious aspects of loyalty, the advantages and the pride anyone can feel pledging loyalty to anyone can outdo any argument against it.
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...yone can outdo any argument against it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77247191011 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7292314657 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564606741573 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8652947908 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9411764706 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183184267655 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555649395746 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502790901879 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104918522251 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329738421565 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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