Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Quick fame leads to the contemporary path which does not lasts for long, whereas goals with long-term vision are proved to be more successful and productive. Specifically, young people today follow the trend of seeking fame immediately and get into the limelight for public recognition, which leads to the overconfidence and decrease in the integrity. Therefore, young people should be encouraged to pursue the long-term goals rather than seeking the immediate fame and recognition.
Without a doubt seeking quick fame and public recognition may lead to impede the path towards the success. Quick fame forces the person to think that they have achieved a lot and this may lead to decrease in the productivity of the person and so their ability to hard work. Whereas, Long term envisioned goals relies on lots of sacrifice and consistent hard work which realizes the person, that what it takes to achieve something and results in growth of confidence and urge to achieve more.
In addition, immediate achieved fame and recognition does not lasts long, as the base of this kind of success has weak roots which might not hold the success for long and consequently will collapse someday. Besides, setting a long-term goal vision a straight path to success but with lots of obstacles and the ability of a person to tackle this obstacles makes him grow with lots of experience. To illustrate, a politician with least good background tends to achieve the lots of fame and recognition to gain lots of votes during election, even though he get elected, and comes in power but he lacks a lot of experience and knowledge to govern correctly and this would degrade his image in the eyes of people from whom he gained lots of fame.
Moreover, considering an example of reputed scientist who envisioned to develop some technology and scribed his long-term goal and worked accordingly to achieve it, someday when he surely reach his target he will be full of confidence that he can achieve whatever he has set as a goal and after this when his inventions will hit the limelight he would also gain fame and recognition, which will last for long and with complete satisfaction. In addition, Entrepreneur who visions for quick success and fame might not last for long in the growing economy, as compared to the entrepreneur who tends to do hard work and giving consistent focus towards his target, would prove more productive than the quick fame achieved entrepreneurs.
In conclusion, young people need to think and vision for long-term instead of gaining quick fame and recognition because things achieved hastily does not lasts for long, and might also result in degrading self-confidence as well the ability to achieve something.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'last'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: last
... achieved fame and recognition does not lasts long, as the base of this kind of succe...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'last'
Suggestion: last
... achieved fame and recognition does not lasts long, as the base of this kind of succe...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...s and the ability of a person to tackle this obstacles makes him grow with lots of e...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the least'.
Suggestion: with the least
...experience. To illustrate, a politician with least good background tends to achieve the lo...
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Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...f votes during election, even though he get elected, and comes in power but he lack...
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Line 4, column 189, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'reaches'.
Suggestion: reaches
...y to achieve it, someday when he surely reach his target he will be full of confidenc...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'last'
Suggestion: last
...ecause things achieved hastily does not lasts for long, and might also result in degr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, consequently, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00883002208 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76365585123 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454746136865 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5805656239 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 189.083333333 118.986275619 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.75 23.4991977007 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9166666667 5.21951772744 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318898659328 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169129045748 0.0831039109588 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.221198702998 0.0758088955206 292% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212699868288 0.150359130593 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.186174260025 0.0667264976115 279% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 14.1392134831 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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