Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
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or of prompt adduces that youth should guide to follow the prolonged and actual aims instead of the ephemeral fame and recognition. This is the claim with which I strongly do concur. Among the countless reasons and facts which give adherence to my perspective, I would delve into the most conspicuous ones to rear my standpoint.
The first striking fact which should be considered is the low chance of achieving fame. In other words, in any society, the scanty portion of denizen gets a reputation among the public. By consideration of the young population in society, few will achieve their desire. This fact is also verified by a noteworthy intelligence study conducted in the Sociology Department of the Tehran University in Iran. According to this research, merely five percent of Iranian can be categorized as the famous, who has accomplished in the field of art, sport, and politics; besides, are recognized by more than fifty percent of people in Iran. In this scenario, among the thirty-five million young generations who live in Iran and seek fame, approximately, two million individuals will reach their desire. What would be the future of the rest is a doubtful question. Therefore, it is safe and sound to encourage them to follow realistic goals with a higher ratio of success.
Another equally crucial reason which should be highlighted is that no fame and reputation lasts forever. Even in the case that the daydreamer youth has achieved his desire of quick reputation, there is no warranty that his fame will be continued for a long duration. Especially with the consideration of the field of acting, it is a real challenge to own everlasting fame. For instance, there was a series on the television which was board cast for three years. It possessed a very handsome and talented actor; whose reputation was in the top rank of filming industry for that duration. However, after a year when the film was ceased from TV and that actor could not act in another film or series only for a year; he has forgotten by the public. Thus, now he is not that much popular and few directors prefer to work with him for the sake of his lack of reputation and recognition by people. This example also verified the importance of deciding based on the actual condition rather than the farfetched dreams.
However, some may believe that the high social status and income of famous people are sufficient clue for persuading the youth to follow their dream. Although this belief at the first glance seems logic; it is shaky and lacks a subtle point. Indeed, high social status and salaries are also possible through ordinary occupation such as working in the field and medicine or engineering. In this case, which of the following option would be a wise choice? A fifty-percent of a chance to become a doctor or an engineer with high respect and millions of salaries in a month; or five percent of becoming an actor with a bit higher recognition and income? Of course, a higher percentage has more guarantees.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and facts explicitly illustrate the importance of encouragement for realistic and prolonged goals. Since the chance of reaching to the world-wide fame is so rare and short-lasting. In addition, identical conditions are also achievable by other types of jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, in addition, of course, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2762.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 561.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92335115865 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8176941449 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51871657754 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 867.6 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1203329638 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6428571429 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0357142857 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217483290295 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532648695903 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447065055175 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112827648308 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358326957303 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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