Children leisure activities must entirely be educational . to what extend do you agree or disagree
"All work no play makes a jack dull boy" is a meaningful axiom. If the ery activity of a child is academic oriented ,they will detest their studies .Therefore, I would probably oppose the idea of it.
To begin with, in the past there were a age limit six to Sevan years offspring could took admission in school but jet age of 21st century they are sent to
schools in earlier age which makes to them bundle of education while ancient children play with their peer groups so leisure activities must be entertaining than educational.
There are ample points of supporting my views. First and for most,games make creative to them. For instance parents should stimulate offspring to involved chess,puzzle, building block and many more which enhance creative activities. However, parents should develop their children 's interest in sports because they as accomplish ability of team spirit , spirit of emulation,confidence and so on. To illustrate, as a survey conducted by"Times magazine has revealed that,participated in games is a sure way learning lesson of winning and losing gracefully.
Moreover,they can develop social and communication skills with playing companion who are neighbouring as well as they can be best friends which is symbol of social skill ,if they communicate each other while playing then communication skill also upgrade
Conversely ,some proportion of masses assert that, if all creativity are thought in schools same as other subjects then they can take seriously,which introduce to children with their talent and they perform well in rat race of tuff competition. Next,as universally acknowledged,"Time is money" in this competitive era parents are cut tough to eke out money so they think this is best way for saving time.
As per my above discussion,it is fruit full that,instead of indulge their leisure time topical academic parents must develop other traits in children.
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