In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.
Modern era is the era of science and technology. Medical science has been improved a lot since last 50 years. Invention of new drugs, improved way of disease detection and successful prevention of many life threatening disease make people live longer than ever before. The positive effects of improved medical facilities are clearly seen in the developed countries.
The economy of the industrialized countries mainly depend on the number of capable workers. Aged people cannot work hard as the young people can do. Moreover most of the aged peoples depends on government money for their living. In a word, if the percentage of aged people increases, the economy of the country become weaker.
Aged people usually posses old thoughts. Sometimes they are not helpful to welcome new thoughts and social improvements. As they depend on government money for their living, sometimes they become frustrated and become alcoholic or violent.
But in ethical sense, it is our dream to increase the length of people's life. Everybody wants a happier, healthier and longer life. The young people will be aged people once. So both young and aged people need to take the issue as the problem of human kind.
In many cases being blessed by the modern medical facilities aged people can work well even after their retirement. Government should increase the limit of retirement age so that aged people can contribute more for the country.
Government can establish industries specially for the older people. Government can engage aged people to the work that is not hard to do such as taxi driving, clerical tasks, monitoring tasks etc.
Increase in number of older people has some impacts on economy and society of a country but definitely we will not try to resolve this problem by removing medical facilities on them and let them die soon. We should take these impacts as blessings and try to work hard together to minimize their negative effects on society and country.
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