The diagram below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process. Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.
The diagrams depict how to make a chocolate bar and the percentage quota of the price of a chocolate bar.
Overall, the biggest percentage of the retail price of a chocolate bar is used to cost of ingredients and overheads. Having said this, cocoa liquor is supplying to make a chocolate bar and food industry.
Cocoa liquor and some waste product are extracted from grinding cocoa in the first process of making chocolate. Moreover, the liquor is used in two ways. The first way, when pressed into cocoa powder, it can be sold on food factories. However, when pressed into making cocoa butter, i...
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2014-01-09 | tiads | 92 | view |
| 2013-11-21 | Nur Shabrina | 77 | view |
- The diagrams below show how the sites of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 55
- It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your 30
- Some people believe that electronic calculators should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered mental arithmetic. Others believe that calculators save pupils time, especially with complicated calculations. Discuss both these views an 70
- The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 63
- The charts below show information about animals and rainfall at the Nboro Nature Reserve. Summaries the information by selecting and report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 55
Comments
I've changed some grammatical
I've changed some grammatical mechanics you have mentioned. Please kindly recheck the correction above. I look forward to hearing from you, Thanks.
Attribute Value
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 204 200
No. of Characters: 942 1000
No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.779 4.00
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.528 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.021 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.433 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.66 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Sentence: Cocoa liquor and some waste products are a result from grinding cocoa in the first process of making chocolate.
Description: The fragment a result from is not usually preceded by are
Sentence: The first way, when pressed into cocoa powder, it can be sold on the food industrial.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to food and industrial
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 206 200
No. of Characters: 945 1000
No. of Different Words: 99 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.788 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.587 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.529 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.971 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.662 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4