Improvement in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the government of richer nation should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such area.
No doubt that richer nations have better facilities and they have improved fields like health, education and trade. However, poorer nations are less developed in such fields. I agree with the claim that richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in this matter.
Richer countries are developed in major fields which helps in overall improvement of country. In the matter of education, they have better and fast means of education and also they have updated education. To illustrate, they use computers which makes education easy and faster. Health facilities are...
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Development in poverty…
Development in poverty-stricken countries is one of the significant issues unless the authorities of wealthy nations ought the obligation of essentials such as health, education, and trade. I strongly agree with the fact that the government of richer countries can better the living of disadvantaged peoples.
There is no denying that the health care system in developing countries experiences an immense downfall every year. For example, in the poverty-stricken country when a person arrives at the hospital to get treatment, not only are they not treated, but they also contaminate the people around them due to inadequate sanitation. They cannot afford basic needs in hospitals. During the Ebola epidemic, it had readily spread in poor countries like Guinea and the Cango in Africa because of the meager quality of dispensaries. Their status can be improved by conducting free medical camps, health awareness campaigns, training the medical staff through funding via authorities of developed countries. As a result, public health improves and contributes to development.
Apart from that Education is crucial and it plays a paramount role in the individual's life. It eases an individual's personal growth and society as a whole. It paves the way for job recruits and can help to earn sufficient money to educate others. Therefore, rich nations should launch programs that teach specific skills set that poor people can use to find work and can also bring progression in their country. Likewise, aid for trading can open a window of opportunities to enhance their economy. However, both literacy and trading can advance the rank of impoverished countries.
To conclude, I strongly believe that aid from developed countries results in the growth of developing countries by improving their health care systems, enhancing their literacy and trade.
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Sentence: In conclusion, it is clear that to walk with modern world poorer nations should have to improved, otherwise they fall down from present.
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