People are never satisfied with what they have;they always want something more or something different.use specific reasons and examples.do you agree or disagree.
In this rampant age of globalization, the lifestyle of people is gaining ground very swiftly. Undeniably, the lust of people to achieve more and more in different fields is sensational. Here,i would like to incline in the favour of statement firmly.
To set in, there are manifold responsible factors to be mentioned. First and foremost, in order to hold prestigious reputation, people tend to keep themselves more and more busy in their work to eke-out hefty sum of money so that they can have aristocratic lifestyles. Moreover, in the recent decades, human's incredible achievements in the fields of technology, science, sports also suggest people to stimulate their interst to join more fields to be multi-talented thus, they do not look satisfied.
Further emphasizing on my point of view, the feeling of envy is also a robust factor to foster people to grab more in distinct fields as the want to out do others by hook or by crook.Moreover, deprivation of moral ethics comprising the value of contentment,humanity, fraternity can also be the prime reason why people are not satisfied. In addition, some people who are multi-talented are example in front of world who also inspire others to be good at in most of the fields.
Adding to it, majority of people may feel fed up whlie doing same jobs or activities time and again. As a result, people want to experience variety of fields where they could explore something new to get clear prespective of life as well as joining different fields allow them to be excellent veteran of life which boosts their self-esteem.
In a nutshell, after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations, I will assert that people have started to believe in quantity rather than quality that is worse for their lives.
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Hi sir , Why my score is
Hi sir ,
Why my score is only 6.5 I was expecting 7.5 or 8.0
Whats the problem with the essay ??
How could I improve it more ??
First, No. of Words: is 299,
First, No. of Words: is 299, to get higher marks, you need around 350 words.
Second, there are a lot of sentences like 'after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations' ,'In this rampant age of globalization' ... which are called 'pattern sentences'. It means you copied them from somewhere else, but it doesn't mean they are good sentences.
Third, be careful to use adjective words like 'swiftly','sensational'.... You didn't use them wrongly, but it is sensitive to put them here or there, so make sure you use them 100% correct. If not, the essay will lose some credits.
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Ohh I got it now ....and I
Ohh I got it now ....and I will try to improve myself for next time.
Tnx very much sir for advice.
And I would like to know that are my ideas n way to support just one side only for agree are good or bad???????
Yes, it is a good idea. 90%
Yes, it is a good idea. 90% GMAT/GRE essays support just one side. But read essay topics carefully, some IELTS essays may ask you talk both side.
You can use this pattern:
para 1: introduction. my opinion: A or B. agree or disagree
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion: because of reasons 1,2,3, so i agree/disagree.
sir , Can we write 2 body
sir ,
Can we write 2 body para for agree n 1 body para for disagree in the form of other's view.. Like 3rd body para- By contrast, others think that ..........????
Better to support just one
Better to support just one side, you can write in the 3rd body para- By contrast, others think that B...blabla for B..., However, still I support A...
Any way, write the essay according to the topic. The pattern is not that important.
Sentence: Adding to it, majority of people may feel fed up whlie doing same jobs or activities time and again.
Error: whlie Suggestion: while
Sentence: As a result, people want to experience variety of fields where they could explore something new to get clear prespective of life as well as joining different fields allow them to be excellent veteran of life which boosts their self-esteem.
Error: prespective Suggestion: prospective
flaws:
Sentence Length SD: 14.237 7.5
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1423 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.759 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.237 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5