Should arts-related entertainment venues such as museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge apply for admittance?
First , the keeping and take care of the staff in museums have so many expenses like hiring skilled staff to clean , study, research, building expenses, electricity power, and other expenses. so maybe people can pay for these expenses and help to take care of the staff inside of the museum or art gallery. Not for the all expenses but just some part of the expense and in this way they feel they are paying for keeping museum or art galley and they art part of this responsibility.
Second, despite all expenses all people even poor people have right to visit museum or art gallery and enjoy theses, no matter how rich or poor they are.So government should have a plan to pay for museum or art gallery to give this opportunity to anybody to vist museum or art gallery.
Finally , I think it it better to decrease price of the bill to the lowest price that any body in society can afford it and then government pay for the rest of the expenses. In this way all people able to visit what they like to see in museums and art galleries.
To sum up, every body have right , no matter poor or rich, and government should have a plan to respect people of their society and give them chance to visit arts-related entertainment venues .
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In most countries, arts related entertainment venues such as museums and art galleries often do have a entry fee. Although the fee is minimal in most cases everywhere, we shall discuss later below whether this charge should be applicable or not
To be able to enjoy any form of entertainment we need to pay for it, and so similarly musuems or art galleries also have an charge. In my opinion, such venues should be paid and not free. There are a few points to validate my opinion. Firstly, such type of places are often very popular tourist attractions, and attract lots of tourists from outside which generates extra revenue for the government, a small percentage which can be used to mantain these places, and not add an extra burden on the govenrment. Also secondly and the most important is security. If these places where to be free there would be uncontrolled entry and exit of people, so theft can happen also other could cause damage to property. However the price shouldn't be too high and should be justified, as a high price will deter people from visiting such places.
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