Some people believe that out happiness depends on how much money we have. Other says that “money cannot buy happiness”.
Do you think that having money is the key to happiness or are there more important factors?
Majority aim of human life in the world is happiness. Variety of ways have done by people to achieve happiness in their life. One of the ways is collect more money. With money, inhabitants would happy easy because total money of people determined their happiness.
There are some reasons which are make people become happiness. Firstly, inhabitants can happy with money, because they think they can buy everything with money. Secondly, healthy can make human happy, because with healthy, everyone can do everything include finding money. Third, affection is the one of goals people to get happiness. Because with love, human can spending their life time with another people which they love. The last, people can happy with authority, because people think that authority make people strong and do everything that they want.
Money cause people crazy, inhabitants do everything to get money, because with money they can buy everything that they want, and make people become happy. There are many things in the world which are people buy and feel happy. For example, people can around the world with their money, and people will have fun with the activity. So people can happiness with have much money, because they can do fun activity with their money. Vice versa, healthy is no less important to achieve happiness. Study in America argued that a large number of people in the world feel happiness because they have nice healthy. This research prove healthy is important to get happiness. People can move to collect money and try to get everything with healthy. People have not more opportunity to do everything if they have not nice healthy.
However, love is also important to achieve happiness. Because with affection, human will feel their life likes become perfect. To illustrate, Affan Alamsyah, the most reach people in Europe, feel his life is not happy because he have not wife, so he cannot share his love and cannot spending their life time with people that he love. This moment shows that love make people happiness, and without love inhabitants would feel lonely and unhappy. Alternatively, authority is also cause people happiness. “Ninety-nine percent leaders each country in the world felt happy”, this opinion argued by Ban Ki Moon, General Secretary United Nation, in humanitarian conference. Further speech of Ban Ki Moon explained that, his opinion is reference to result of study in several weeks ago. With this case, authority has become important to achieve happiness.
To conclude, the meaning of happiness is abstract, some people feel with money they will feel happiness, but some people say healthy is the most important to get happiness. On the other hand inhabitants feel love cause them feel happiness, but the other inhabitants believe authority is everything to achieve happiness. From my personal point of view, human can be happiness with everything they have. As long as people are grateful, so they will be happiness.
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Sentence: With money, inhabitants would happy easy because total money of people determined their happiness.
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